On my rise to heaven,
I slipped into hell
Tumbling down the,
never ending spiral
Torn into a million pieces,
of flesh and bone
No heart left to beat,
no mind to think
Only a soul,
shrouded in darkness
alone
A contest entry
- Quicky Prompt - PIF - 40 words by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended May 12, 2008, 15 entries
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Very sad and yet uniquely beautiful. I love it. Great write, I'd love to read more.
-Lust
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all i can say is,
welcome to hell.
love this, sad, lonely, and a good forshadowing of what is to come for me.lol
great write,
KNIGHT TIME
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Lordy I hates that place... I remember letting msyelf slide there.... sure am glad that darkness only needs a little light. *smile*
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On my rise to heaven
I slipped into hell ...
I liked that
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Find your light..it is there. It resembles a lighthouse.
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