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Precious Metal

Oh! Hello there precious metal.
When did you get here?
And can you relieve the stress
From those I held so dear?
Just slip across the surface.
A quick sting and release.
A tinge of blood and a line
To put my mind at ease.
Peer down a while later.
Clean with a bold streak.
How lovely, but I know I should stop.
Yet I'm sure that I'm too weak.
Hello again precious metal.
I have a new bracelet from you!
What a pleasant little gift.
Perhaps one more will do...
Read between the lines,
Names are written bold.
My precious metal's souvenir
For no one to behold.
Go now precious metal,
I think you need a rest.
I'll be fine without you.
Or at least I'll do my best.
Hello precious metal.
Now look at what we've done.
I know that I should stop now,
But I've already begun.
Please precious metal,
Relieve me of my pain.
You may give a quick sting,
But I'm too numb from disdain.
Come here precious metal.
It's our time alone.
No one must know about us,
From reactions of who I've shown.
Oh precious metal,
Look how you've addicted me so.
Those were one too many blood drops,
It's time for you to go.
Oh hello there precious metal.
How is it that you've been?
Myself, I'm perfect lately.
And the scars are wearing thin.
I'm finding myself smiling more.
I have other ways to deal.
Now I use less hazardous things
So I can let myself heal.
Hello there precious metal.
I have no more use for you.
Goodbye forever precious metal.
I'm finally through with you.

Author notes

This poem is pretty self-explanatory. And the ending is true.

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Comments

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  • Firequeen
    March 16

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    bravo for you.
    Cutting is very hard to kick.
    i am very proud that you quite
    this very good and so honest
    perhaps thats what i love most about it
    huggzzz fire


  • xXdeadXinsideXx
    June 27, 2008

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    Love the poem it was really well written. I liked the ending most because you stoped cutting. I'm trying and hopeing i'll be able to stop as well. Anyway your poem is VERY good, keep up the good work!


    • LittleMissFaith
      June 28, 2008
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      thank you for your comment, and good luck stopping! it is difficult but definitly possible


  • Lostdreams
    May 27, 2008

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    good job stopping, i'm trying to stop, it is very hard but i know(hope)i'll stop. this poem sends a amazing message, keep writing


  • peregrin
    May 18, 2008

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    It is really hard being a recovered cutter, but congratulations on doing it! This poem is really well written and I like it's message.


  • thesefadingstars.
    May 10, 2008

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    This is a heaps good poem!I love it!I notice alot of people on this site are either cutters or ex cutters...


  • Sound of Madness
    May 8, 2008

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    I'm glad you're done cutting. It is a very difficult thing to do. I'm an ex-cutter as well. Great write love.


  • For You. I Cry.
    May 7, 2008

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    damn sweety that was deep and amazing. u already know that i relate to u in this but seriously u got talent... i think this is the best youve written so far.. and ive read almost all your work... btw.. im proud of u for giving it up


  • Hate-And-Pain
    May 7, 2008

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    Wow, an amazing peom the flow was perfect and the meaning is deep and honest. A beautiful piece indeed, i can deffinately relate to this, for I have cut in the past myself, and its true it is an addiction. WEll done my friend keep up the great writes.

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