I've spun my web,
played the game-
So baby, don't even think your special
every one of you, your all the same.
I'll steal your soul
make you pay,
for mistakes you didn't even make.
Your's was a fragile existence;
easy to break, easy to mend,
turn you in to anything I want,
baby, to my desire, you bend.
My stare is tense and blank,
at least, that's what they tell me
I wouldn't know Darling.
Cause your all I ever see,
the subtle arch of your back,
the poise in your step..
It all makes up for the intelligence you lack.
You can pray all you like,
but either way,
It's all the same.
My life was desolate before you entered,
So you really think I'm going to trade
that for empty space?
That's right, you thought you were here to get laid.
With a mouth like yours,
who would protest, right?
You thought you were the player.
Baby, you just got played.
My heart, well, let's just say it's heavier than lead,
and I'm not above ripping you down
from your position as public icon number one,
I'm not afraid of taking you to town.
We're all conspiring against you,
making you think that you have voices in your head
just so that you meet our demands.
Lionize me all you want,
doesn't make a difference to me.
Cause our plans are already concrete,
and I'll never let you be.
Author notes
I used four from each word bank. Also, the lines
"And I'm too self-centered to leave until you need me."
vi.
"razorblade intent behind angel's eyes"
If you don't get what's going on, just ask ^^'
Not sure If I like this one yet.
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[forgot the clappy guys]
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"My stare is tense and blank,
at least, that's what they tell me
I wouldn't know Darling."
"With a mouth like yours,
who would protest, right?"
You nailed it.
This strikes too close to home to be comfortable--
and I like that.
Awesome job. And I feel the rhythm, I can hear it, I think it flows just fine.
Thanks for entering
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I didn't mean to spell that wrong if i did.
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I think it needs more rhythem. But yeah It's really good.
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You did, *Rhythm, but that's okay. I can't really seem to get a good flow going, too out of it right now, but I'll keep looking back on that.
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