Beneath swathe of darkness
Six days before
(yet too late)
God's teardrops
Landing like bombs
Glorified ignorance powerfully
All on ones' retinal rod
True love
The Day God Cried
Alone
Author notes
Hindsight is 20/20
Looking toward the future....
Written December 19th, 2003
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GASP...good!
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this poem was written so well, keep it up. I hope to see more poems like this and more poems that are written so clear like you did. Your a great poet keep it going
Well that's all for now written from Jennette Miller
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brilliant
This is a wonderful poem, I clicked on your name because I love listening to enigma.........Glad I did, this is great......
Sanity.
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dam this is touching, great poem, great words, awsome pic
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God loves all of his children, we have been lost in the dark, but remember there is always faith for us, I hope
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well written
i like this poem, its very deep...a little too deep for my teenage brain, but i still like it. Im surprised no one mentioned (unless i accidentally skipped over it) 1) you give God some VERY human traits, 2) bombs dont really land, they sorta...explode, and 3) that according to the story of creation, the world was created in 6 days. First of all, giving God human traits (such as emotions and crying) is a very christian thing to do, for example, all the christian art that shows God as a muscular white man with white hair and a long white beard. I'm jewish, and judaism tries not to give God many human characteristics. As a famous rabbi once said, people only give God human traits because we, as humans, can't understand anything that could accurately describe God. Basically, im assuming you're christian. Second of all, bombs dont land, they explode. Thus, you are really saying that God's tears are exploding and causing destruction, which is very interesting. and lastly, if its 6 days before creation was completed, it would be before the begining of the old testement. There is some kinda story about what there was before creation, and it talks about vessel of divine light breaking and some other stuff. I dont really know how the story goes, but this poem could possible have to do with it.
Anyway, great poem, i liked it. And as a last question, were u actually thinking of any of this stuff i said when u wrote this or am i just crazy? -
I accidentally clicked on this...I've read it and commented before. So, I gave you two more featured views in pennance. Mea culpa, mea culpa, mea maxima culpa!
Edited on Jan 24, 9:22 p.m. because 'can't spell worth shit.'. -
I tried to leave a comment before, but I don't think it worked. I love this poem! Your imagery was astounding. Rarely do I see work of this quality. Well done!
Your Cerulean Dreamer,
Michele -
Would it not be possible that, since man can cry God can as well...Since God made man after his own image...it would seem that God was the first to cry, and not man.
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Beautiful
This is such a great poem, powerful. I hope that my work will someday be as beautifully written as this poem is here. -
this is though provoking my friend!
somehow i can see this scene though my mind!
and all I want to do is comfort him!
Well done!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill -
short and sweet...very powerful too...i liked this write alot...interesting concept to write about...very nice!
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Beautifully written. You were able to fit so much into a very short poem. Great write.
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Hi Enigma!!! Well, this is gracefully and beatufilly written. I myself, am a Christian, but do not give much attention to Religion, at least not in quite a long time. Before yes, I actually gave quite too much attention to it!!! But then well too many things that did not quite fitted with me. But anyway, whatever faith may be it, these lines of poetry are just great!!!! Thanks for sharing this poem with us all!
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I think there must be many days God has cried, and I am intigued by the metaphor of terdrops like bombs. I don't think I'm cerebral enough for this poem, or at least, not at 2am!) but it is thoughtprovoking and sends one's mind off on unplanned tnagents, which isn't all bad! You have some profound though processes, certainly enigmatic - this was the only poem of several I felt I could attempt to comment on. That we write on different planes I do not dispute, but that does not prevent me admiring your work, I just feel at a loss of understanding much. Humble bow, friend poet.
Sheona. -
god...i keep coming back to this one, over and over and over... and everytime i still get the same feeling that i did, when i first read this...except now, as i read it, you make me long for my mom, and for comfort hugs..and my friends that i can't see anymore because i live so far away...
it's taken on a more personal note to me now...where i feel like God, and i am crying alone.
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BRAVO
I was referred to your page by a friend on AP (Redstormy). I must say that I am very glad that she did so. Your talent seems so raw and pure! I too live in the great land of cold (MN) - and send you the warmest wishes possible! The poem it self is strong yet humble - The flow is soft yet bold - Its almost abstract - I would have to say: LOVE IT! Please feel free to stop by and say hello
Sending warm wishes
AuroraMoon
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aww i like this one its so nice
i feel akward writing a comment on your work as you seem to be a very high-up person in this community of poets sorry if that sounds mena well great write if you dont mind me saying
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The idea of crying alone is sad. But I think I am going off in the wrong direction because of what I think when I hear the word God. Makes me think of my blasphemous best friend who claims to be just that - God and I never want them to cry alone.
Yet, no one should cry alone. Not even the Christian God. And I am sure if there were one, she would weep most pitifully at what her creations have wrought.
Anyway, my rambling and left field diatribes aside, I liked this. I may not see it the same way you do, but I want you to know it made an impact on me either way. Thank you for that. -
you know, i think the part that i find touching the most, is the lastlines, where you say that god finally cried alone. in a brief instant it struck me as terribly sad, and i think i felt my heart break...
Nyx...
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awesome
such a powerful write you have here. awesome. I hope you will keep on writting I will be reading more of your work. I hope you will read mine to. -
Power packed...and effective in provoking " thinking material " ET...this reasonably short write could elicit some intense discussion - and you have conveyed a personal belief incredibly well...
Enjoyed...
Happy New Year - Peace and Love Revolutionary
~ sonia ~ X
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"Ther day God cried" now there's an interesting concept... An incredibly simple poem that works so well because of it. The last line was especially powerful. Hindsight is also interesting - if only foresight was as reliable! Spirituality over religiosity anyday, I agree - I found your above comments very interesting. Especially that you see God in every athiest you meet because to you God is love. Also one to think about. Well done.
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Looks like we have something in common. I don't believe in the god most people believe in, either. I prefer spirituality over religiosity (but I don't attack peoples' hope, whatever it is...if someone finds hope in religion, that's cool. If they find hope elsewhere, fine. I only object to the hopeless).
Sometimes god is the hand we reach out to people who need hope...and hope is a form of love). To me, God is Love. It's all about love or it's all about nothing. We are all capable of love, and if love is God, I can live with everybody (I see God in every atheist I meet). Anyway, I am rambling. Thanks for the comment, sister! I do appreciate it! Peace & Love. ET -
strange......I dont believe in god, not the one everyone else does. but this is pretty darn powerful none the less.
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I love your author's comment that tells of you looking forward with clear vision. I bet He has cried alone many of times.
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Very powerful.. And worded to perfection!!!
Really enjoyed this it's a rare read.....
Wonderful poem....
Kimberly -
Divine
This one commands attention (and applause). So much is said in an abrupt elegance. Left me thinking a bit.
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what a different way of looking at it. Very beautifully written...gave much insight, yet it held so much power and emotion. definately well penned, bravo!
~~Jenn -
Sad
Yet powerful and so beautifully written
I posted a new one last night
Do come see me won't you
Wanting to wish you also a Merry Christmas
Happy Holiday
Susan~~~~~
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This composition reminds me of someone who is narrating the scene when Elijah was taken up to heaven and all the things that happened to the Israelites before and after. (I Kings).
Everything about this is helpful to the plot and theme which means that there is NO place we can hide; we have as much reward to receive as we do punitive, according to WHOM we follow.
"As sure as eyes have sight,
The day God cried
was, then, at Night,
For alone is not a heavenly place
too dark to see The LIGHTED face."
Thank you! Blessings, CookieZeal/ -
Wow this is powerful sad yet beautiful! I love it my Minnesota friend.
Red -
Just thirty words you used here my friend~~ all of us should pay attention to this poem "How to capture the World's sadness in thiry words"~~ this poem is the lesson for that class {sounds like a good contest idea~~ if only someone would hold it now because this poem would WIN}
And you managed to capture all that sadness in thirty words because you obviously carfully chose your words. You sSHOWED us the dispair and you gave us an owner to that dispair. Beneath your images, we all know we are to blame somehow, yet there is a helplessness as what to do to stop that dispair....
Your thirty words are most powerful Enigma. I am always grateful enough that you find the words to convey your messages~~ that you hold that talent within you
Outstanding writing
~~Dawn
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evocative
perhaps my brain is malfunctioning today...but I am unable to decipher this one. It evokes a feeling of creation, renewal, and forgiveness....but these are imaginings that can not find proof in the words you wrote. I love the poem, nonetheless...it holds some amazingly evocative imagery for such a brief piece....but, I must hang my head in shame at my inability to understand its meaning. Thanks for sharing this.
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I have also written a poem similar to this which mentions God's tears. It's called Starting Over. In mine, God's tears put out the fires of His wrath and create the oceans. This end of the world stuff isn't pleasant to dwell on, but if more people thought about it, it would never happen. People have to wake up and realize that it is not an impossibility. The way things are going it could be brought about by the hand of man rather that by God.
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I love the picture... and the poem... just not together? The picture reminds me more of the sky exploding, not being able to get away, knowing death is near and waiting for it to come. The poem is more of a sad, not fearful image, like god sitting on a dark cloud crying because all hope is lost.
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I wonder if I heard you read this..and watched your eyes, if I would be anymore sure of what I have just read. What I have taken from this does not match well with your authors comments.
I feel Gods sadness and loss as he takes away what once he gave, Life...love....
My take...and most assuredly incorrect.
holiday smiles my friend...
Mary ann -
Such rare, yet revealing truth here, E.T. Short, yet so powerful, and that's what I love about this! We live and learn, or rather, some do. And, we should always move forward, even though at times, it seems so incredibly hard. But, you're doing it, and I am too. Keep going . . . Merry Christmas to you and yours! Love, light and peace!--Kel
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