Being the master of deception;; how does it feel now that you've lost?
How does every decision that I make; result in yet another heartbreak
[Completely compulsive]
Of every little delusory glance you've sent my way
I'm still waiting on a different story
You've shown me nothing but illusionary
You have everything you've ever wished for; just open your eyes
You said I'm everything you've ever hoped for...
What a handful of lies.
You were right, it's all the same
Your troubled emotions conquered this obsessive game
&& I was right about your fractured heart
Living the incomplete dream of how we both fell apart.
Virtuous words never spoken as revealed thoughts start tearing you down
I build a wall to keep it all in secrecy; bargaining for love to finally forgive me
[Our chances are gone]
But I'm not the one who hasn't moved on
Tomorrow is just another day
To watch you throw everything away
You have everything you could ever need; just open your eyes
Hoping these words are exactly what I want to hear
Though they're just "harmless lies."
But you were right, it's all the same
Your troubled emotions conquered this obsessive game
&& I was right about your fractured heart
Living the incomplete dream of how we both fell apart.
Your true side has shown
And I should've known
That you'd never change
I hoped for the best
And came to the obvious conclusion: you're just like the rest.
[I find myself living the incomplete dream of how we both fell apart]
Author notes
This poem is mainly about how I wish I would've just spoken out and said something, but I never did, so the whole time I was just living an incomplete dream. I thought I loved him, but hah, we all know how that turned out.
Falling is easy. Picking up the pieces and restraining yourself is the hardest part
A contest entry
- I-J Titles Contest! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
450 points, ended July 8, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Something Sad by LittleDecoy.
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great job on the poem.
"You were right, it's all the same
Your troubled emotions conquered this obsessive game
&& I was right about your fractured heart
Living the incomplete dream of how we both fell apart."
i liked the repetition of this verse. --especially because it's my favorite verse in your poem. =)
totally relatable poem. great job.
and good luck in my contest. =)
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Definately relate to this, as I have often just left all that I wanted to say in the dark, because I didn't want to hurt anyone... not that it mattered when others hurt my feelings, they didn't spare me but sometimes you just have to let someone go, no matter how much you adore[d] them.
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ok love this. Again love your usage of brackets, i have a couple of poems that im yet to put on, that i've used them in, and well... i'm rambling. The flow and structure of this one is great. One thing i might suggest, 2nd line might sound better with does as opposed to is. 'How does every decision...'
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That ending line is brilliant, it filled out this poem well. This is such a sad piece and yet it holds a lot of beauty in it's words. Regret is a terrible sickness and is so hard to get rid of. I hope you can let go of it, I know how things like this can haunt people. Beautiful work, I really enjoyed reading this piece.
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it comes across as a personal rant- direct, blunt, hurt, angry, and full of sadness.
it's strength is in how it captures these things not just in the words, but in how it flows.
and my favorite line is definitely "the incomplete dream of how we both fell apart"
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Ahhh, Mandalicious, this one was definitely AMAZING. Your poems are getting stronger and stronger!
*You said I'm everything you've ever hoped for...
What a handful of lies.*
Ohhh, wow, I freaking LOVED THOSE LINES YO. You seriously just hit the nail on the head there. PERFECT<33
*I build a wall to keep it all in secrecy; bargaining for love to finally forgive me*
I love how that flowed! And those lines totally spoke to me and opened up my mind again...
*[Our chances are gone]
But I'm not the one who hasn't moved on
Tomorrow is just another day
To watch you throw everything away*
Hahaha Freaking exactly! Seriously, one day, we'll run into them, see them, and just walk the hell away. It's gonna be GREAT<3
*I hoped for the best
And came to the obvious conclusion: you're just like the rest.*
So basicalllly I fell head over heels for your last verse (lol) but that was my favorite part, everr.
Awesome job hoe! I'm so glad we're friends! You've come a long way.
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