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Fallen

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There are men with hearts full of darkness
Who must destroy what is good and pure.
So women must guard their treasures well
Or the pillaging will be swift and sure.

She was an angel with wings of downy white
But no mercy was shown in the brutal attack.

She's an angel still.  He couldn't change that.
But her delicate wings have turned to black.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • LoveorLust
    May 28

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    I relate to this write alot...and you know it has a strong message...and I enjoyed reading it...congrates on the bronze

  • Talloaks silver member
    May 18

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    Good taake Congratulations on winning Bronze. Gives a strong message women should be treated gently.


  • Mrs.Keizor
    May 15

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    I know that you didn't write this for me, but I feel like in many aspects, the poem is about me. When I read it, it reminded me of all the battles I am going through right now with certain people and how I am still the same person yet different and I'm trying so hard not to fall... I love this masterpiece Uncle Mark, I always do!


  • Chuck Johnson silver member
    May 6

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    And there are men set apart
    Who's hearts are so dark
    Fallen Angels would fall apart
    in horror at the truth.

    Men whos desires know no bounds
    dark places where midnight is found
    Souls without mercy, evil clowns
    exist among us

    Angel of mercy, light of lights
    pray for their souls, turn them bright
    Grasp their hands, pull them from hells night
    or die by their thoughts

    Never as good as you Mark, but I felt the need to continue your thoughts. The thread of darkness in our mist is always there just waiting its time, target of opportunity, and the insatable desires hidden in everyday activities.

    • Mark Rickerby gold member
      May 6
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      Chuck,

      I like where you took the poem a lot - how it would hurt the angel even more to know the depth of the darkness in some men's hearts, and praying for them because anyone in that kind of darkness really is lost. Though I was raised with Christian values, my anger toward predators always makes it impossible for me to pray for them. I pray for their victims and their victims' families, but I know it is a greater feat to pray for evil men. Thanks for expanding on this poem, and my usual mental limits. I can always depend on you to help me do that.

      Mark

  • AusStar silver member
    May 6
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    Oh how dark, good but dark!!


  • IntrinsicallyNoGood gold member
    May 6
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    I think it portrays a definintive loss of innocence. Well done!

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    May 6
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    I just did the final edit on it. I have a bad habit of posting and editing afterward. lol Sorry about that. Take care. - Mark

  • coffeeangel316 silver member
    May 6
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    great write


  • coffeeangel316 silver member
    May 6
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    Really great poem . I like the rhythym and the flow of the poem. Great job.
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