In his time
I play inside my head
there’s no one to hear me,
none can witness my
laughing
descent
into a
chaos of
falling.
I allow and will myself this
time,
my you time.
Unchecked in my wanderings
I float
ever onwards,
no one is interested in me
and if I
don’t care
it doesn’t matter
what
anyone
thinks.
They shout at me
try to impress upon me
the importance
the need,
such an interminable need
to
Grow
Up
and not to
be
me.
Not to tread my
solitary
way.
Conform
Be an
Adult
Have responsibilities.
Take responsibilities.
But to where?
And why?
In his time
I am free.
Our freedom a solitary sharing
of single minded madness,
I imagine connection
I create situation
I envisage a future
picture him in my time
feel the hot white spurt
of him
in
me.
Taste the ridges
of his flesh -
the waves of insecurity
caress the bud
I desire.
In his time
no manacles of convention
engulf me.
I luxuriate
in
him,
be what I dream of
be who
I
am.
Escape the confines of civility,
lick out that heart of
shattered faith,
diamond fragments
of a lust
untasted.
In his time
alone
he allows me
permits me
invites me
desires me
craves me,
unyielding
he whispers
he hungers
he longs
he yearns
he
wants me
to be
me.
In Johntime
I am
free.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- The Largest Contest On AP!!!! by Midnight-x-Rose.
3000 points, ended August 26, 2149 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
are the short lines too repetitive?
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Wow... I don't even have the words to say...
This is very wonderful! I wish I could write like this, lol. I don't think the short lines are too repetative at all, but then, I'm not an expert either. I loved reading this!! Great work!
Jade Rayne* -
WOW...I love how suggestive this is without being overt. You create some very vivid images with your use of language as well. The way you structured this is very chaotic, but I think that just further emphasizes the thoughts you're having. The last stanza really brings out a sense of fulfillment and happiness. Superb!
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Nay, if nothing else, the short lines actually assist in making this flow with an unusual feeling.
I sense an empowerment of oneself in this, and also seems so succinct. I greatly appreciated the usage of the words you've chosen, as it seems very dignified and resolute. In particular;
"Escape the confines of civility,
lick out that heart of
shattered faith,
diamond fragments
of a lust
untasted."
Is one of the best written things I've ever read on this site. It feels overwhelming, so powerful and raw while not taking up too much time or room. As with the rest of it, all seems to correlate extremely well.
Fantastic!
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ahhhhhhh....crying.... this was really well done, and its sad that i can hardly bear to read it because i'm just on the edge of a breakup with my boyfriend JOHN... T_T
wahhhhhhhh
but on the other hand this is really well written and i appreciate your raw emotion here
[wahhhhh T_T *sulks*]
well anyways thanks for entering
good luck
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it usually has a negative impact on me, when I see a poem entered in so many contests, but this was good
I am myself a maverick disdaining routine and conventions so i connected with this piece
thank you much for entering
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In Johntime
I am
free.
the ending is great i love the form that you wrote this in good job -
definately unique. i had to read it a few times, but very well done. great job
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wow this is very great...
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Wow this is very interesting and unique. I enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering! =]
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I ;liked t ver ymuch thanks for sharing. there is a;ways that time and that certain thing to do to be free in your own time.
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