It's time for you to up and go,
please leave my twisted tourtured soul.
Your love,
it meant the world to me,
but then you left me in a sea,
of broken hearts,
and bleeding love,
the sky lights you from up above.
With gloomy clouds,
and dark grey skies,
the lightnings crashing in your eyes,
i need you,
and you need me,
in this bumping,
crashing sea.
You know my darling it was you,
the one who tore my heart in two,
so now i see you in the dark,
the very place you broke my heart.
I look,
your staring out to sea,
waiting,
watching,
wanting me,
your face is wet,
and arms blood red,
from all the nights at home in bed,
knowing what you did to me,
will haunt your once fond memories.
But this will stop,
i promise you,
the day you leave this sea of blue,
It's time for you to up and go,
Please leave me here to rest.
Alone.
Author notes
The sea of Broken Hearts. Anyone in the same boat?
A contest entry
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This is the first poem i've written for a conest and am very chritical of my poems so please be honest :)
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WoW this is full of emotions,
great flow.
Very nicely done.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Thank you so much wow im sorry i'll spellcheck next time sorry much love xoxo
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welcome to All Poetry!
Hey Kayleighxo
Nice write! Very emotional! I felt the power and your emotion flow from the page!
"With gloomy clouds,
and dark grey skies,
the lightnings crashing in your eyes,"
~ I found these lines to be very powerful and love the imagery in them. You're quite talented, can't wait to read more of your work!
~Peace and Good Vibes~
Keith
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I thought this poem was pretty good besides the spelling errors of course it was still pretty good
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wow!!! that was very beautiful and well written!! u had a few typing errors, but it was beautiful!! but i dont know exactly what happened to the other person???? but it was really good!!! bravo!!!
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