unlike a poet,
being a woman is not easy.
your song is not always cherished; your heart,
not always loved.
the flower of your being is not always planted
in the vase itself.
sometimes, it is never plucked. sometimes sold
to a man, six-feet tall, with bright blue eyes. or sent to a
girl who shall throw it right on to the dressing table,
or the bed.
the poet turns in her bed,
now a woman:
her words unheard
as she strokes her own skin
with a caress
that could well have been his.
Author notes
I got rid of the other two pieces. Yaay!
The other two are "of long and short staccatos" and "landscape of a poem"- if you want to find them, they're here, lol.
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A contest entry
- Skin by Heart Sutra.
1000 points, ended May 6, 2008, 41 entries
Honorable mention
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not too shabby at all.
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is being a poet easy - it has caused me a lot of madness in my life but at the same time a lot of fun and joy. a good poem, i like the tone, different cultures comes ot mind with sold or given away. the ending is a sigh that floats away in a daydream.
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beautiful.
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last stanza - dang.
I'm still wishing I could write like you.
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from what i have read of your work, you have a very distinctive voice, rich, deep. a lot to sink into, like a plush cushion. this is my first piece of yours i read, and remains my favorite. lines 3-6 especially reverberate with me, seeming to rise from a pain dulled into resigned wisdom with age.
like the further development of the metaphor of the flower, "never plucked" or tossed "on a dressing room table." fabulous imagery throughout, speaking volumes, but those parts were especially strong for me.
the only line i could even think to question would be the first "Unlike a poet" - are you drawing a contrast between being a poet and being a woman, and yet, here the woman is a poet as well? Just don't quite understand that first line, probably just me being dull.
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment.
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Good in the way that makes my eyes open a little wider.
Really good.
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This is awesomely beautiful, Namita !!! You have wisdom and maturity beyond your tender years
A supurb piece
Dee
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Thank you so very much, Dee!
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connected a lot with the last. you manage to kick my butt frighteningly easily, young one.
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My apologies, there is not an adequate superlative in my lexicon to approach my thoughts on these three pieces.
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Well, I can't find any words on how to thank you, too, Geo... Such a wonderful compliment!
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Amazing poems you have here beautiful one.
So much feelings penned with beauty
The second one made me sigh deeper...
You!
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Thank you Mari!
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Amazing...the depth of your pen is simply gorgeous and your understanding of being a woman is so tenable that one can smell it in the words. You bring me full circle with these three, I loved the first one when I first laid eyes on it but now to combine it with the others makes it a powerful statement of being a woman and a poet and the things that define why we are and why we write. I think you may just be something younger generations will read and I will be able to say I knew her when... Love, C
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Wow, that is such an amazing compliment, thank you, C! Glad you liked the poems.
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I love them all, but 'flowerless' sure is powerful & emotional for me to read..these are so beautiful..excellent poetry, Nami...wow...congrats on the hm..and you know I already love your landscape one, too..lol
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lol.. Thanks Tara... "flowerless" is my September poem, y'know.
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Dear me Namita, words fail me to be honest. They are all good but that second poem should be written in stone so it will never be forgotten
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Thank you Heath! Three of my favourites, here!
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Wow!!! These are wonderful.... " of long and short staccatos" is sooo naughty (as are the last three lines of "flowerless"). "flowerless" is painful. I can relate to it way more than I should
I love the imagery... Gosh I wish I had written "flowerless"!!!
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"flowerless" is painful. Yeah, very much
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"unlike a poet,
being a woman is not easy.
your song is not always cherished; your heart,
not always loved.
the flower of your being is not always planted
in the vase itself."
yes, and sometimes the vase remembers the good hours. This is beautiful - all 3 of them, but tonight the last one spoke to me the most. You are a true talent, girl....amazing!!
~ Nicolette
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The last one is my favourite too... Thank you, Nic
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i agree, stunning...
al
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Thank you Al
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gorgeous! beautiful! stunning!
you are a true talent!
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Thank you Zayra.
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i loved it, namita, these are so so pretty!! not taking anything away from your other two, the last one just completely blew me away..
"being a woman is not easy.
your song is not always cherished; your heart,
not always loved. "
wowness. sheer wowness. i love you, and i am very proud
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the third is my fave too... but i shouldn't talk like that about my children, lol
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