You
now run with the flow of my blood
echo the boom, boom.
The beat of my heart.
I’m
lace clad
and
craving the heat of your hand
on the organ of life itself.
Bliss in life, from you and
everything shared between us.
So tonight my fiancé as we come together
let our hearts beat our love in time
as we create our first,
our first child…
Author notes
well think i did it wrong anyway...went away and wrote..now realising it says picture on your page...when I was inspired by and used the one on the contest page not ur page...???
Um so I dont know if I am in an option or not relly lol..but my poem is expressing the connection between my partner and I, with me trying to use poetic devices liek you asked for etc
This inspired me to think thoughts of when me and my partner create our first child...talking of our love and it happening etc...
Just dq if it isn't what you want, I don't mind
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A contest entry
- Quickie; 10 poets, 15 lines, picture/quote prompt-- ENTER NOW by perfectsunset.
450 points, ended May 20, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Nicely Done ... I like youre style ...
I am short Poem writer... and I love it...
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Thanks
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Oh Wonderful
This is just beautiful my precious niece. I like the way you wrote this one. Boom, Boom, this was fun. Very nice and sensual and the imagery is just awesome. You did a beautiful write on this one. Thanks for sharing your love with you fiance' with me.
Much Love
Your Aunty
Kelle
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Thanx Aunty Kelle and it's my pleasure love sharing the lve I have for him
Cin
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I like this a lot. It is wonderful writing. The imagery is breathtaking in this. A very loving piece indeed. Well done.
All the best
Wayne Leon
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Thank you for you very kind comment
Cindy
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This is beautiful sis!!! What gorgeous emotion and feeling you have put into this... aww... romantic!! And yay. baby.. yay.. lol
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hehe Thanx SiS..wanted to have so much more then just love in this write
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That is so very honest and beautiful, congratulations on a well written piece of work!
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Thank you so much
Cindy
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taiinfinite
the title is so becoming of the poem nicely penned good luck in contest
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It was going to be the first line, then I placed itself really as the title..when I saw it like that I thought yeah ..thats better to continue the stream of thought to come
Thanks my friend
Cindy
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This is truly a beautiful and passionate love poem. It flows and is dripping with image and emotion. Well done but wait untill you're married.
Love,
Amera♥
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hehe I cannot wiait till we are married...the rest of our lives ahead of us
Cin
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This was a beautiful write, and yes I meant the picture on the contest page. So you did follow the rules, you chose to be pic inspired. This was a treasure to read, so sweet yet sensual, and I like your take on the prompt, it's something different. A job well done!
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Thanks Az, I do feel pretty blessed
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Oh Awesome I was like noooooooo But I love this wirte I did, so im entering it anyway hehehehe..thanks for sparking those thoughts for me
Cin
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That is just a treasure!!! How blessed and sweet. Best of luck to you in the contest!!!
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