This good life was my
Birth/school/work/child/love/home/death
Mummification
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13 words
Written December 18th, 2003
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Short/sweet/effective!
Good luck in the contest.
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wonderfully terrible sentiment. and true, i think. i've had looong conversations that run right along this theme. i really enjoyed it, speaks volumes in 17 syllables.
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This is really good, like everyone has been saying you have captured it all in a few words, great haiku thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.......
Take care
sanity......
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yeah, you are really good at haikus..you know that shit?
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wow you explained it all in one sometimes it isn't in that order but then again life is wierd you never know what you'll get or find if you don't look and listen, I was mummified once in this life actually a few months back, I found it to be quite enduring and intresting, good luck
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somehow, I don't think haikus ever answer my questions... always leave me wanting more...
good job anywayz... and good luck in the contest!
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Well my dear, you certainly covered all aspects of life as we know it. Great Haiku! I like your style. Sum it all up in a few words. And so, that's that! Great work!
Hope the best for you and yours with this new year!
Many Blessings!
Renee
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a suffocation? i can see that...
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cool,i like this.it says a great deal.i like haikus and this is a really fantastic one.good luck -
heeeey, neato.
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Nice! I didnt think that you could get such a meaningful message in sucha small poem. But you did. I like it but heres a little suggestion. I think that maybe you should try to make it longer and more heartfelt. But im just suggesting this. Anyways nice write! Thank you for sharing you poem!
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nice, but what about that search for something more?
I feel as if that one might have to be read "between the lines"
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wheeere issf that dammn spatchula ... acccchh.. ~scrape~
Ahh. Now that my jaw is off the computer table. lol
Certainly one of the most interesting poems I've seen on the circle of life...and again, certainly one of the best Haikus I've seen. That second line is stunning, like a flash of each component gives clear meaning to what you are saying in pictures.
I think you are trying to say that the life we think we want to or have to lead will end up binding us...wrapping us in cotton and making it hard for our coated fingertips to feel anything.
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This Haiku is really great! The normal boring life when we do not fight and try to break out of it and search and ask-exellent view!
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i dont fully understand this one so if you would like to clear it up im me but if you dont feel like it its ok also...thanks so much for your time...lots of love -wildchild**
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