A ball
curled into
Earth meets flesh
I’m frigid
Web weaved
you’ll never untangle
My heart,
will you ever find?
Author notes
Not personal feelings just written inspired from pic for contest
In a list
A contest entry
- Morning Quickie PIF 9-20-20 by Cerulean Sunrise.
525 points, ended May 6, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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bravo!
i really like the broken up structure here, it enhances the imagery of this 'frigid' person, and it reads like someone who is so cold they can barely speak! well done! -
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I am all for working on the form to give even more to the poem
, so glad you felt that
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nice take, hides much and reveals little, the seemingly broken structure of expression highlights the repressed content.
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Thanks ...sometimes I like the hides much poems
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Nice Write!
Best wishes in life and the contest
Peace in light and love
Noah
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Nice
It certainly matches up with the pic.
Good take
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Thanx glad I could put something in..Loved the pic..wish we had more then twenty words, I cut it down and down lol
Cindy
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Aww... beautifully sad take sis!! I've been there many times!! Sigh...
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god haven't we all hey..so just what the pic spoke to me lol
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Aww this is beautiful hun. Lovely wording, breaths life into the pic, good luck
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Thanks darl..I try lol
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*looks round for words* Will be back
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lol
jus editing em in now so in one minute lo
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Yay.. glad you're here sis!!!!!
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