when you think of someone every day
when they do not fade
only renew
the love you feel won't leave
won't go away will you?
you like to haunt me?
well I don't mind
you entertain these bitter thoughts
I love to love
but hate to love you
you only destroy
never nurture
shut away what's left of me
I love you so much
that I hate what you do
I hate how you control these emotions
I hate how you get in this head
and stick there forever
don't listen to the words of others
shut the fuck up
you're a lying prick
and I grow tired of your shit
but don't leave me
stay for a while
I love you so much
that I hate your departure
I hate your control
I hate who you are
but you linger within
you stay with me love
Author notes
I love him so much, it just turns to hate"
- 'Doll Parts' by Hole
A contest entry
- Quote Inspiration. by Puking Faerie Dust.
1200 points, ended May 19, 20 entries
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Comments
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I feel this could have benefitted from some poetic devices, like metaphors and similes, and imagery. It sort of sounded like you were ranting/talking. Also, "lieing" is spelled "lying", just to let you know.
This definitely has potential, you just need to sort through some rough edges. Thank you for entering, and good luck 
Jeanette*~
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