As you reached across
to touch
what used to be concealed
but now butterflied into existence ~
I quiver
unfurling into a new identity
veins feathering beneath soft flesh
as the red of my heart
plays out into gentle deliverance
rocking me into you
deeply...
A contest entry
- Whispered Words of Sensuality by StormGoddess.
1000 points, ended May 27, 2008, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Girl... you need to teach classes on sensual writing! This is superb. Beautifully written with excellent imagery.
Thank you for entering and good luck.
Storm -
"what used to be concealed
but now butterflied into existence"
Ooh, my favorite 2 lines that flow sooo well!
"unfurling"
Great use of this word--again I commend your use of verbs!
Love the word 'feathering' as well. This is classy but sensual, a tough balance. Nice job! -
Oh wow.. not that is a stunning piece of sensuality...
I am in awe of our talent!
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So Beautiful
WOW this is just beautifully written. Such a nice soft and gentle sensual poem done with excellence in taste. I loved the flow, rhythm and imagery in your poem. Excellent sensual poem I thoroughly enjoyed. Thank you for sharing with me.
Many blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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