When I was a child I was pure and innocent
Then one day my step dad came to play
We went into his room and he locked the door
Touching and licking me all over, sometimes leaving bruises
I felt so dirty and hurt, my trust demolished
Ten years have passed, it's still going on and much more
Just scared if I tell anyone, will he hurt me more?
Writing poetry about how anxious I am,
and comforting the thought of death is
Angry and depressed, carving deep into skin
Hiding them with long sleeve shirts, sweaters, or wrist bands
Kids at school thinking I'm weird, making fun of me and don't understand
I don't see any reason to live, nothing good ever happens to me
Author notes
What do you hide in your world? (I wrote about a girl I know. Since my world isn't too dark just fucked up differently)
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A contest entry
- Semi-Quickie.(dark)Dark Society.. by Angelflower.
450 points, ended May 6, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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I know how it feels to be abused also..... When I was about 5 years old I was beaten and so I still feel that angst today....It's something that scars you for life and you will never be able to get rid of that horrid horrid feeling.....uhhh good poem =D
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wow... that's deep.... how did you ever think of that?
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ouch that hurts to read
and kinda makes me angry
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wow, this is really well written
but also really sad
this is about a girl you know?
i hope she is able to know that its not her fault
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very interesting, and in a way a cliffhanger. wat did the girl do? personally, id write a sequel to this poem. nice job.
-Bella
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AMAZING JUST LIKE YO
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damn thats intense. idk what to say xcept amazing language and imagery. great write
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I really hope your friend gets help, my friend cazie didnt and she's dead now(not to scare you or anything) but with something this serious someone needs to be told.....it's a pretty good write
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i hope she's ok, and gets help. the world we live in can be a sick, fucked up place. i can't even imagine what that must be like for her... to have something that horrible that never ends, like a nightmare you can't seem to wake from, must be incredibly hard on her. a strong and powerful write, i like how you conveyed the pain and horror of the the situation so perfectly. i hope that bastard ends up in jail where he belongs. a great write on your part
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oh my god. this hapend to youre friend..is she ok?god thats fucked up and scary. this is such a sick world we live in with sick people. i hate steep parents.
cool poem thoe. i liked how it had a meaning.
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Well that girl is in your world. Be it at school or anywhere else, you at least see her. Yes, child abuse is very real and scary. I thank your for entering.
~Kystal Angel
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Oh my god. This is so powerful. You poor, poor thing.
I was recently raped and that alone was hard. To have something ongoing like that, must be devestating, to say the least. I hope that you hang in there, and hopefully find the courage to tell someone about what is going on.
I wish you courage, and the ability to hope for a better future.
Take care of yourself.
<3BD9
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Wow! Emotion radiates from this piece, its something very strong and something that many people only dare have to courage and the skill to actually portary it skillfully in poetry. Its a solemn topic to write about but strong, sometimes we do have to stand up for others, sometimes it takes a great masterpiece to open peoples eyes to the real world. Let the person read your work and maybe just maybe you might be able to help her out. Great write
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This is pretty good. I read poems about this kind of thing all the time but you didn't make it cliche. It just is. You make it simple but you still give the same beautiful hurt. Great job!
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AMAZING
o my god that is probaly one of the best poems about that and i cant realte but i can feel your pain through your poem and im so sorry u had to go through that
britany
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wow, this has a lot of emotion. and sadly, i can relate. i loved the colors of the background and the picture was amazing. awesome write, i loved it.
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awww wow, this is very sad *hugs* a great write and i hope that girl is alright.
but good luck nad take care
stephanie
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you did a wonderful job!! this was really dark.. and though it's about someone else you really brought out the pain and let everyone else feel it as well.. great write!! best of luck..
Angel
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I can relate so much. It was great how you expressed the emotion so well. Good job
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This poor girl. It still makes me sick to know that sick bastards do this to poor innocent children.
I don't see any reason to live, nothing good ever happens to me- that line really hurt me, just to have that burden constantly on your shoulders and have it weigh down on you. I hope that girl has had someone to talk to and I hope that bastard is in prison. Great write!
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Yikes what horrible images...the imagery is wonderful though...just a horrible horrible circumstance. I hope she got help. I think it could be a little bit more poetic...you're telling emotions, describe it more... like
" writing away the aniexty and fear,
the comforting thought of death scares me. Cutting
is my only solace..."
or something like that. But this is a good start. Best of luck at allpoetry. -
Wow I feel bad for her, what an ass who did that to her. Truly dark and terrifying, nice write
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