Trying To Hold On

Like an explosion

deep inside of me

my heart trembles

as my body collapses

Like a runaway freight train

crashing through my mind

I try to hold onto my sanity

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PIF Quickie by Nighttime angel. 950 points, ended May 7, 2008, 12 entries
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Nighttime angel
May 6, 2008

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great poem that you have here. one that I can again relate to.. my favorite line out of your poem is the last line. excellent take on the prompt.

good luck

kat
Topaze
May 6, 2008
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Very well done, an impressive piece. my best wishes in the contest.
intanglio2ring
May 6, 2008

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Great take on the prompt, I could feel the anguish from your words. Always a clear honest take compatable with the picture.
Good Luck in the contest bro,
Tang
Griswold
May 6, 2008

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Very well done for this picture, i can see this in the prompt J-man. best of luck to you with this...Scott
StormGoddess
May 6, 2008

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Well that certainly fits the picture. It's powerful words for powerful emotion. Well done my friend.

Good luck in the contest.
Storm
Arizona Sunset
May 6, 2008
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exactly my thoughts...excellent poem! best to you in the contest ~blessings always~ Trisha