Alive In Your Eyes

   Alive in your eyes
   and lost in your breath.

   I pull you close
   till our lips have met.

   Fondling sensually
   your curved silhouette.

   I thrust into you passionately,
   as I taste your sweat.

   A loving embrace
   I will forever relish...

Author notes

Thanks to ALL for this chance to express myself without regret.

Matthew-Parry

Option #5

"hot and needy"

A contest entry

TURN ME ON! by Sylvyrwyng. 1000 points, ended May 9, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Please be critical in your commentary on this piece. Your critique will help me to grow strength and wisdom through spiritual expression, as I journey through this existence.

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Adding your comment:
Wayne Leon Learmond
June 20, 2008

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Brilliant piece. Great flow to the piece too. Deep, passionate and slightly erotic too. Nothing really to criticise here, other than the ending of the piece does not quite rhyme. Well done anyway for this work. Enjoyed reading it.

With
Dark
Wishes
Wayne Leon