Fallen,
as hope collapses
from faded ivory skies;
and held in metallic shadows~
where thoughts linger without mercy,
as I find myself captured
in just another rut
of forgotten daisies.
Author notes
One time, long ago, how things felt.
Picture Prompt- credit: http://bloodygrave.deviantart.com/art/Ironic-Silence-77283691
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In a list
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie by Nighttime angel.
950 points, ended May 7, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think.
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I absolutely love your take on the prompt. I found that I can relate to this poem quite well. I'm sure that many others can relate as well. Lines 3 & 4 stood out to me the most. excellent take on the prompt, and also excellent job with your poem.
good luck
kat
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Ah! now this is a piece written for the masses. So much on this site is written to cater to 5% of the human race. This piece caters to 95% as it is understandable and makes sense. Congratulations on a wonderful write. All my best wishes to you in the contest.
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Thank you for the comment, much appreciated.
Storm
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So glad I came along to gather your flowerery words and smell the beauty!
Wish I could truly gather them up!
Good Luck in the contest Beautiful
Tang
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They wouldn't be so sad.
Thanks for the comments sweetie.
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forgotten daises are sad.
Nice take indeed
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Daisies are supposed to be happy flowers!!!
Whats up with that!! 
Well done for the prompt, best of luck...Scott
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LOL, well these daisies looked a little limp! So they ain't too happy!
Thanks for the comments.
Storm
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