The world is rotten
With the shining sun
Warm summer days
Baking my hair
Birds singing songs
The flowers growing
Seeds of daffodils in the air
The sky over my head
Storm's approaching
With good intentions
To water this Earth
Unwanted droplets of
Dew dotting the leaves
Honey sweet nectar
Extracted by bees
Nature's fashion statements
Yes, the world is rotten.
Author notes
It's a little more than 30 words but I hope this short poem will suffice.
Picture credit - http://bloodygrave.deviantart.com/art/Ironic-Silence-77283691
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie by Nighttime angel.
950 points, ended May 7, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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seems to me that your damned if you do and damned if you don't.good piece.
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This to me comes off as hot and cold . . . I suppose what I'm trying to say- a mixed message, insofar the title doesn't match the content of the poem. Other than that, I liked it.
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I really like this cube, makes you think!
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this is an excellent poem, you did an outstanding take on the prompt. just have a question regarding the last line. is word supposed to be world?
good luck
kat
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A unique piece expressed in a subtle yet extreme way. Very well done! My best wishes in the contest.
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