Hearing the words
whisper on the wind,
the night you left..
I rage and cry..
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Victom to my emotions..
Trying to block out the lies..
I love you
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A contest entry
- PIF Quickie by Nighttime angel.
950 points, ended May 7, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this is an outstanding take on the prompt. ahh a feeling that I have felt long ago. the form that you have written this is, I love it.. especially the way it looks like the falling is like tears.. excellent job
good luck
kat
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SUC H DEEP SADNESS!!!!
The pain of one who deceives does tear ones heart apart.
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very good take on prompt..... loved it... thank you for sharing with me.... thanks for sharing your heart... keep writing sis i love it....
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Very well written as always. Good take on the prompt. Good luck!
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A very heartfelt piece, that easily touches the minds of others. My best wishes in the contest.
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thank you very much.. I'm glad that you liked it.
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I rage and cry..
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i really love how you typed out falling to resemble tears. you have captured this prompt so well. As always another
masterpiece. Best of luck in the contest.
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Good poetry
This is very well done! Wonderfully conceived and brilliantly executed! The final end was perfect well.
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Aww.. really sad sis!! Terrible to be lied to and still love a person... brilliant take on the prompt!
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