I ALWAYS HATED THE LITTLE THING
THE ONE THAT MADE YOU ALMOST SEEM
UNREAL TO TOUCH, UNREAL TO SEE
BUT THATS TOO MUCH FOR ME
I WENT TO THE PLACE OF EVERYDAY RAIN
THE PLACE WHERE ALL MY FLASHBACKS REMAIN
EVERYTHIHNG REMINDED ME OF YOU
EVEN THE SMALEST RAIN DROP WAS PICTURES SO TRUE
I DIDNT WANT TO SEE THE PAIN
IN THE END THIS WAS NO GAME
WHEN PLAYING WITH A PERSONS MIND
SUCICUDE CAN NEVER REALLY HIDE
ALL THE THOUGHTS THEY HAVE CROSSED MY MIND
BUT I WOULD FOREVER KEEP OUT THERE KIND
SO I WHISPER MY SECRETS ON A COOL BREEZE
HOPING THAT HE MIGHT HEAR MY PAINFUL WORDS
I KNOW HE WILL NEVER COME BACK
QUIT WORRING ITS TOO LATE
HE DOES KNOWS I FEEL THIS WAY
SO I CRY MYSELF TO SLEEP AT NIGHT
DO I REALLY THINK THIS IS RIGHT
I KNOW I CANT LET MYSELF FIGHT
EVEN IF THIS IS MY LIFE
I UNDERSTAND SO LITTLE
SO LET TONIGHT BE A GRAVE
DUG UP FOR MY DECAY
I SWUNG MY LIFE INTO MOTION
AND CAUSED A HUGE COMOTION
I DONT NEED YOU ANYMORE
BUT I WILL ALWAYS HAVE YOU IN MY HEART
FOREVER YOUR IMAGE ENGRAVED
LIKE A SKELETONS DECAY
YOU WILL ALWAYS CROSS MY MIND
AND I WILL WONDER WHY
BUT YOU WILL NEVER SEE ME CRY
OH I WILL HAVE TO TELL SOME LIES
TO EVERYONE WHO THINKS THEY CARE
BUT DONT EVEN KNOW ME AT ALL
THEY LOOK DEEP INSIDE MY HEART
BUT ONLY A BLEEDING LIMB LAYS
I SAY IM FINE JUST TO HEAR
EVERYONE SHOULD KNOW ITS CLEAR
I NEVER WILL FORGIVE MYSELF
AND I HATE TO SAY THIS DEAR
YOU WERE MY LIFE
MY EVERYTHING
I GAVE IT ALL
TO BE WITH YOU
SO ALL THE PAIN
IT REMAINS
AND AS I DIE
I TELL OF HIS GAIN
Author notes
This is a heart filled poem that just came from the back of my mind....
Mylee
A contest entry
- I'm alone......are you? by movedon.
700 points, ended November 25, 2008, 103 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What was your first impression?
Comments
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You have 24 hours to re-read my rules and fix your AN. Otherwise, it's an auto DQ.
This is a stunning write. Heartfelt and strongly penned. For something that comes from the back of your mind, this is very impressive. Thank you for taking the time to enter.
ing alone,
Mylee -
Wow....a great poem...so much emotion and sadness.
A true work of art..well done.
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Wow..
Amazing poem,
but again, it worries me.
The emotion inside it is chaotic and distressing.
So powerful too.
I may not know you in real life,
but I do care, you are very nice even if on the inside you are very cold.
I'm nice on the outside but hollow and oh so cold on the inside.
I can understand it kind of.
I really do care, and see you as a friend, even if we don't know each other in real life.
You are still an amazing and wonderful poet and person to me. I really do admire you for your kindness and poetry.
So know, that if something is wrong, you can talk to me.
Mmk?
I will always listen.
By the way,
the part I really liked was;
"SO I WHISPER MY SECRETS ON A COOL BREEZE
HOPING THAT HE MIGHT HEAR MY PAINFUL WORDS."
It worried me again.
But it was still brave and great words,
And I think this is the best poem I've read today.
Truly.
Hope to hear soon,
Your friend,
Kinsey(Kaeven)
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