I will be the sunlight
dancing in your hair;
the breeze that carries kisses
within whispers,
wandering like wishes tickling the cheek
of the one you adore;
the scent of vanilla musk
upon your pillow, oh so subtle
gently taking your breath
as your heart flutters upon a memory
and when you gaze into a twilight sky,
I will be the twinkle
when your last tear falls.
♥♥
~
Author notes
pic inspired
A contest entry
- Somewhere Deep In Your Mind by Errant Panther.
460 points, ended May 10, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love the ending to this, such a powerful emotion to leave the reader hanging on. wonderful phrasing and image creation. best wishes to you.
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Ooooooh ! I like the feel of this. ".... the scent of vanilla musk upon your pillow, oh so subtle ...". A bit of eros and a bit of pathos in a great read. ~Jim
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Magically Beautiful =-P
I stated that in the verdict because it is. it has a whimsical magical style flow through it. your words flow as beautiful as an Angel gracing its beauty before us. any ways wonderfully penned poem all round & its amazing how just the spark of a picture entices our muse to write something so beautiful of this caliber. good work & good luck
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Such a sweet and nostalgic windsong sigh...but you are the angels of skies that whisper forever
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A beautifully touching piece of poetry, sweetie!
Sigh...
I LOVE this as it stirs the most tender places in the heart
Wishing you the best of luck in the contest!
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Oh my dear friend,
This is just simply amazing! so soft and delicate your words, and they just flutter into the heart of the reader. I love it!
Best of luck to you in this contest!!
and love
Nyetta
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Simply beautiful!!! The depths of each words reach beyond the heart filling it with comforting love...
A most elegant piece of poetry dearest Queen!
Love this!
All the best in the contest!!!!
Jazzy
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