Under canopy
of stars,
your hand
in mine.
Question,
I never
thought I'd
hear.
Silent shivers,
my initial
response.
Signed,
sealed,
with
a kiss.
Author notes
Prompt:Gazing the stars 'neath a moonlit sky
A contest entry
- Cherished Quickie - PIF by StormGoddess.
425 points, ended May 7, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Lovely poem on a beautiful memory! Really appreciated the way you have mentioned his hand in yours before anything else, makes the poem more meaningful somehow.
'Silent shivers,
my initial
response.
Signed,
sealed,
with
a kiss.'
The initial hesitation and then gradual acceptance has bloomed so truthfully through these lines. Great write!
God Bless
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Hi Julie ~
To propose under the stars....*sigh* ~
Lovely thoughts on the prompt....Silent shivers.....goosebumps as I think about a time similiar to this......and you have brought the senses of touching his hand, sight of his beautful eyes looking into yours, sound of midnight breeze caressing your chilled arms, taste of nighttime mist and the smell of his warm neck caressing your lips as you say....yes ~
Lovely entry indeed,
God bless,
....and good luck......this should do well!
Bear ~
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Well that definitely works. I hope that second response was a yes! Nicely done. Thank you for entering and good luck. Storm
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This is a lovely poem... I really like the short ans sweet style that you do so well, and with content like this it works like a charm
Keep writing
Polly
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What a lovely, romantic, peaceful feel to this. I love the image of being under the stars and falling in love. Nicely done!
best wishes in your contest.
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