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Deplore

Silver droplets draping delicately
across this emerald woe
during the ghoulish storm
of your unmistakable refusal

Author notes

16 words
Prompt: No

I thought of all the times in the past when the answer was always no...

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  • Intricate Wordsmith
    May 28, 2008
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    Good luck in my contest.


  • DogTagz-TheJalapeno
    May 27, 2008

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    Its really interesting. I liked it alot. It was just the most simply delicate poem Ive ever read. Good luck on the contest!


  • crimsondew
    May 5, 2008
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    Congrats on the gold!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 5, 2008
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    Ahh oh yes I can relate!! Brilliant take on the prompt!


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    May 5, 2008
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    Totally creative and immensely detailed... x


  • crimsondew
    May 5, 2008
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    You brought out the feeling very well..Like it..All the best!

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