As she backed away, I gasped for air.
Choking on blood
I pulled out the knife.
My wonderland heroine
had done me in.
I staggered,
three steps I took,
dropped to my knees
and gave her a look.
She was a hot nymph
in that blue pinafore.
I, thought, "how damn sexy"
as I finally hit the floor.
A contest entry
- Dark Side Of Alice...Image Inspired xQUICKIEx!!!!!!! by voodoo ink.
700 points, ended May 6, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Crawl Back Up The Rabbit Hole by Isabel Cult.
800 points, ended June 7, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Criticize freely, I need input to improve
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Interesting, but not really what I'm looking for.
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This put a smile on my face...don't know why, just did.
I saw this and couldn't come up with anything...this was a wicked take on the prompt.
Most enjoyable
Luv ~sweetness~ x
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Nice take on the prompt...Alice is a psychotic nymph and you are her victim.....SWEET.....thank you poet for your entry in the contest...
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I played the computer game.
I've also wrote a short story about a return to Wonderland. Its a subject that I enjoy. She has a wonderful dark side to her.
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*shiver* ooo dark! good luck in the contest
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