I never thought it would be this way.
Step back love.
Look at me.
Whatever I did wrong this time,
I’m sorry.
Whatever I did right beforehand,
Was it ever good enough?
You fed me lies,
That were fueled by my own desires.
You spun up a wonderful fantasy,
But now darling, it’s gone up in flames.
It’s a shame.
Wasting so much time,
Trying to mold me into what you wanted.
Every time was close to your distorted view of perfection,
I would mess up.
Fall over.
And the cycle starts again.
Degrade me.
Cause me pain.
Just don’t leave me alone.
I yearn to leave the silence of one.
Let me travel besides you,
On roads paved to hell.
After you left,
My world was tossed about.
Shattered.
And after you left,
A glimmer of hope bloomed.
When you return,
I won’t be here.
I will have left with the shadows of night,
Hoping that you won’t follow,
And bruises will heal.
Author notes
Oceanna
A contest entry
- Break My Heart by Mistress Masquerade.
600 points, ended July 11, 2008, 47 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Control by Girl With Guitar.
700 points, ended February 18, 48 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - /B/r/e\a\k\ me into p.i.e.c.e.s, Im such a h-o-p-e-l-e-s-s case. by Silent Emotions.
900 points, ended February 25, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Each line in a poem is not necessarily like a sentence in prose. You have to think of each stanza as if it is a paragraph. Full stops and commas only need to be in places where you intend the reader to pause. Therefore, not at the end of every single line.
After reading through this all... wow.
Quite a bit too close for comfort.
I like the different control issues here, the being controlled then coming through it and healing from it. In a sense, being controlled then being able to control your life. Great job.
Thanks for the entry and best of luck. -
Another brilliant work by our own Oceanna!
Hehe.
Love ya!
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Mmm, I relate to this in a deep way, the pain, the hope, the hurt.. Just all of this brings painful memories rushing back, but that is exactly what I wanted for this contest, thank you and good luck.
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