Everlasting pain
That’s all you ever will be
To my broken heart.
Slowly suffering
Chains wrapping tighter, harder
Around my body.
Spinelessly I crawl
Towards the glowing, warm light
Which forever evades.
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its kindof haiku based.. as in each verse has the 5-7-5 thing
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forever evades, is perfect! i love the word evades. and this is so rough, i can relate to the pain in it. this is a great set of haikus. keep writing and take care!
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It's a good piece, I like it. However the last line has 6 syllables not 5.
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beautiful, you've written a good poem from haikus
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Beautiful,
Thanks for entering, good luck.
Bell,
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I do like the shortness of this piece, but beyond that, there was nothing really special that spoke out to me. Sorry.
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...i like it.
lmao too much said in the previous 2 comments. -
lmfao.
i KNEW u would change it to that
i KNEW ITTTT.
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emma i like it
but the third line only has three syllables, lol, not 5
other than that its amazing
i lovelovelove the last stanza
and you
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