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Peacock Evening

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I felt pretty
surrounded by warm feathery voices
drifting in pungent sea filled air,
down river wending,
stars staring down the milky way.

Moist night air,
seaweed strands thrown across my breasts,
moist fingertips tracing my heart.
Eucalyptus scented vine wound around,
exciting narrowed reedy breaths.

The past, a boomerang,
returned to split my mind.
Memories hold mysteries,
acrostics of humanity,
to be discovered when alone.

I felt pretty,
peacock perched, awaiting her peahen,
evening breezes caressing my core
where passions seldom stirred but
were reawakened to roar.

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Author notes

Magenta
Some words for you:
whispers
billowing
slither
twined
roily
floating

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  • butterflywriter
    June 17, 2008
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    Outstanding piece

    congrats on the Gold


  • Nephlim
    June 16, 2008

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    Amazing fourth stanza, especially the middle lines, specifically "Memories hold mysteries" . Such fluidity from one word to the other and one line to the other, you get a sense of peace and serenity just reading it. I love the first and last stanzas having the same beginning line =].

    Complaint time.
    Read my rules and put what you need to in your author notes pleeease . Other than that, good luck!!

    • Sprite silver member
      June 16, 2008
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      Thanks so very much for the gold. You were too sweet! I left you a few words that I like to use. I love magenta! A lovely color. ~ Joyce


  • Lyndon gold member
    June 6, 2008

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    You have placed the aroma of the eucalypt in an exotic setting where it is tangential to the thrust of your poem which I did enjoy reading very much. Interesting title and fine images. Best wishes,
    Lyndon of the Winklings.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    May 6, 2008
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    This is such a beautiful piece you have penned here. You have truly done a great job. The imagery, words and flow blended well together. Best wishes to you in all of your endeavors and thanks for sharing this with me. Keep that pen handy and ever ready for use dear poet.
    ♥ Touchof1der

    • Sprite silver member
      May 6, 2008
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      Thank you so very much for your extremely kind comments. I respect your opinion so this is an honor for me.

      ~ Joyce

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