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You Think I Care for You?

To list it all
Is something too easy
This rubber ball
I love more than you
This car so tall
I see more than you
The season called fall
I enjoy more than you

Stuff, stuff, stuff it away
List, list, list all we have
See, see, see this message?

To chuckle so
You think you belong?
Think you are strong?
Think I am WRONG?

You are nothing but a rat
A thief in disguise
Hiding from the bat
That hears all you say
Hiding from the cat
That sees your dark movements
Hiding from the fact
That is finely displayed

How can I conclude?
You are nothing to me
Never have been
Never will be

Can I get an honest Critique? xD

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  • Qiuyu Akiko gold member
    May 7

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    Finally*
    Slight typo.
    Good poem though.
    I liked it a lot.
    I've written a few like these.
    But then again...
    Most of my poetry is dark.
    I'm all the "Doom-and-gloom" stuff.
  • fantasylandthinker01
    May 6
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    VERY GOOD JOB I ABSOULUTLY LOVED IT... JUST AMAZING

  • Shirley Shaw
    May 5
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    NICE WRITE'''''

    WOW!! WELL, THAT PRETTY MUCH SAYS IT ALL...LOL...LIKE IT!!! CAN I CALL ON YOU, WHEN I NEED TO TELL SOMEONE OFF ???? LOL..SERIOUSLY, THIS IS CUTE. I REALLY ENJOYED IT, AND YOU SURE TOLD (WHOEVER)OFF !!!"GOD BLESS"...LOVE, SHIRLEY ANN SHAW-RAYTOWN,MO....