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I Am A-Live Light and Free.d



Light and free.d,
skip with me light upon my grieved death.
Released, buried and at peace,
until the day..I awoke.

Stunning amazement,
all is fresh breath and clear clarity.
Ending the grief of misbeliefs,
anchors of drought self-cast about me.

And for once,
I need to gain a few pounds here and there!
My gawd, what about....family, work, and ...
Soft sigh, and laugh....gentle peace speaks.

"Released from eternal sleep,
it is now your decision to decide."
Actions of faith or dread of life.
Rearview mirror or gas pedal of patience.

"Words will be easy, the relinquish challenging."
Have you learned, listened in realms of rest.
The bold honest lessons of each test we must face.
Feast the banquets of humility, feed strength.

Powerfully, unleashed,
the first of newborn tears presented a gift.
New found energies burst through my heart,
anguish replaced by hunger's bold love for .......

each day,

that I am blessed to live, love, reap, repent, scream, sing, f..ck it all up, freak, weep, smile, and forgive bountifully, bouncing booty laugh, tear off my clothes, yell from life's chandeliers;

I Am....

A-Live.

Light and free.d.

Author notes

Contest prompt: died by poet strangulation (private joke)
and woke up...alive...write without boundaries.

A contest entry

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  • jamiedoring gold member
    May 27

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    sigh...

    oh wow.

    every part of that was fantastic but your ending was perfect and beautiful. Lovely indeed. Congrats on the shiny prize.


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    May 26

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    Full of spirit and love of life, a well considered and rich response to the prompt, which I thank you much for.
    Still, I feel that a certain amount of depth has been missed, by speaking as if you are somewhere else rather than entirely gathered in your own immediacy and purely coming from there.

    I read:

    A succinct introduction, to the theme.
    Light heartedness.
    Transformation

    Ending the grief of misbeliefs, -Yes, right on the button!
    anchors of drought self-cast about me. -Interesting situation and way of expressing it. At this point I would let them lay aside simply to be what they are, nothing to be lost should you choose to come back to them.

    Nice touch of humour.

    'it is now your decision to decide."
    Actions of faith or dread of life.' -No decision really is there? But yes, to consciously choose and remember to do so, these lines describe an admirable state of self awareness.

    "Words will be easy, the relinquish challenging."
    Have you learned, listened in realms of rest.
    The bold honest lessons of each test we must face.
    Feast the banquets of humility, feed strength. -I like this very much, the relinquishing could be of 'words' but equally anything previously held onto. It seems to question about a period of spiritual retreat. Why no question mark?
    I would have liked to have heard more directly from the depths and wisdom of these 'realms of rest', rather than your suggestion of them to another and not being as entirely plunged into them as I believe you may have been.


    All the best to you and good luck with the judging.

    Sol


  • NurseChilly gold member
    May 21

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    I am so so so glad you put this one back, as this is what i liked about it, is that it let you look at being free and seeing life undone and beautiful

    i think waking up to death as a love concept is difficult, in the way, we have to know death as moving-on experience, it isn't about the ceasing of life in us, but in the way we can make amends and close-down in order to rebuild and renew

    i think you dipped your toes in the water nicely here, and could have run with it some more, but i applaud your valiant effort

    well done and many thanks for entering

    G.x

  • Lucy. gold member
    May 12

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    Exciting and inspiring! I loved the 'each day that I am blessed to....etc' parts. Made me want to jump up out of my chair and run outside singing and tearing my clothes off, lol.
    Loved reading this.


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    May 6
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  • isabelwk
    May 6
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    thought provoking

    Very interesting read. I liked the line, "all is fresh breath and clear clarity". Good luck!

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