i sit fully clothed in the shower
cold water pouring down on me
mascara and eye liner run down my face
holding my knees to my chest
hugging myself as i cry
choking on my tears
my hair soaked down my back
letting the water wash away my pain
watching it all go down the drain
disappearing slowly with no light on
no reflection in the mirror
the cold tomb cradling me
the only comfort decending
cold fog in the glass door
my fingers tracing a pattern in the cool steam
soon the black rose will befriend me
What did you think
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that's incredible
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What a heart-touching write; the raw imagery of mascara tears in the cold shower fully clothed is strong and incredible.
Amazing write
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Awesome again! The title makes me think of I am Legend or something, but a great write again!
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This is amazing!
So much meaning.
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This is so amazing... WOW
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eerie and beautiful. the imagery simple yet so powerful i was transported there. amazing.
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wow
very powerful
sad and emotional
hopefully you are okay -
you ability to write is beyond me. THis poem is truly amazing i can relate to the eotions of this poem
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Sweety, this poem broods with a sad and dark melody...I, too have these feelings of emptiness and hopelessness...This is though you were writing from my thoughts (aside from my hair soaked down my back)...excellent capture of the pain in your imagery...
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wow I really like how this one came out. Sad but very strong emotions stressed here. Great images of your loneliness and depression. Hang on there and keep writing.
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girl u write so...so girl u rock!!!!!!!!!!
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