Take this noose, and wrap it tight.
Hang me with your self righteousness,
and kill me with your inanity.
This was never my battle,
but you have dragged me in so far
that it is hard to separate my dreams
from your ambitions.
So make it quick and sweet,
make it so lovely that I forget-
For a moment that it means I'll die.
Author notes
Danneh sad. Really didn't do well with this one.
"Mutilation" by M4LFUNCTION @ deviant art.. Was meh prompt.
I'm so stuck on this whole society kills me thing.
A contest entry
- a dark and demented doom-quickie 12/10/20 by Immortal Obscurity.
500 points, ended May 5, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites. by Melissa Gayle.
600 points, ended May 18, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be harsh, be specific.
Comments
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I can appreciate the sentiment but to me, this reads a bit more like a letter broken down into short lines.
I do hope you are in better spirits though. -
Oh I like this. It's reads pretty good.
I wish you luck in the contest.
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Hmmm... I actually loved the second and third stanzas [though 'seperate' should be 'separate']. They made the entire poem, because I had an overbearing father, though not physically abusive, so this kinda hit home for me. His bragging-rights were the only reason I stayed in univ. for as long as I did, and I made myself miserable just because HE wanted me to graduate... So very easy to relate to, and thanks for sharing.
Laura x -
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Hmm, It didn't show in spell check v.v But fixed. Glad you liked it.
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