Nights of warmth and passion
days filled with sun kissed smiles
love sent to me in such a fashion
that it traveled effortlessly over the miles.
A voice as soft as summers rain
you whisper so softly in my ear
gentle tones call out my name
such loving and tender things I hear.
You held me tight in times of pain
tenderly caressed my hair
when tears they flowed like summer rain
you pulled me out of deep despair.
We shared so many ups and downs
through every changing season
from anguished cries to happy sounds
our love grew strong for many reasons.
The days with you I'll always cherish
held so tightly to my heart
my love for you shall never perish
even though our bodies had to part.
Author notes
Quote prompt : "I want to hold the days in my arms forever especially the days I spent with you.....Unknown."
In a list
A contest entry
- the days I spent with you..... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended May 19, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This was another amazing poem. So much passion...so much love. Brilliant. You deserved the gold, you earned it. Great write!
~W.W~
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Nice to see different side of your writing..this was so lovely and passionate..very well deserved for the Gold my friend..
Ruby
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Amazing writing, Your thoughts really enters deep into the readers mind. I can see why this took gold. Excellent work.
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Thank you Much ~Bret~
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well I am again here to read your wonderful poem..thanks..well done...
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I like the beauty of the thoughts which you pourned in the words..coming from the soul itself..well done..my thanks for sharing it....
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Thank you so much I am glad that you enjoyed it , and thank you for the gold ~Bret~
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This is so soft and lovely, again the rhyme is gentle and pulls you into it and draws you with it until the ending when you actually want it to continue. Beautiful work. Love, Chez
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Thank you so , for such an encouraging comment, actually this whole Rhyme thing is rather new to me, I usually stick to free-verse, I have never been much a fan of rhyming poetry, much of it seems forced, words just added here and there to make a rhyme with some other line,and they never seems to truly fit.. but lately this style seems to have seeped into my soul from somewhere.
I am glad that you enjoyed it. ~Bret~
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Sometimes the muse insists on that rhyme, I do not do it often either, much preferring the freedom of free verse, but who am I to fight a muse lol Love, Chez
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this is WOW.... I loved every line..... you definitely have a way with words my friend.....so beautifully put. I am so glad I clicked on it.... thanx for sharing.... hugs and love Linda xxxxxxxxxxxx
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Thank you much Linda, I am glad that you enjoyed it ~Bret~
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