Summer loving
Under the sun
Mermaids swimming in the sea
Memories, I can’t forget thee
Every night, walking on the beach
Raging hormones blazing in the heat
Laughing as waves roll across our feet
Often found, singing out of beat
Very loud, screaming in the sun
Incredible bodies on everyone
Never forget the week I spent with you
Growing fond of a summer that, I never knew
Azure water crashing upon the shore
Tiny creatures crawling on the ocean floor
Trees blowing in the gentle breeze
Hot, sexy bodies that
Everyone sees
Bikinis in so many varieties
Every size and color, some are empties
Always lying in the hot sand
Cheering for some music from another band
Hand in hand, We're sprawled out across the land
Author notes
summer acrostic, try singing it, its almost perfect ♥
going for a silver
A contest entry
- All for Fun (taking ALL poems from anyone) by Erozay.
450 points, ended May 7, 2008, 35 entries
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375 points, ended June 8, 2008, 10 entries
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Comments
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mermaids swimming in the sea..,Memories I cant forget
thee. thats what life is...Memories
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In line 20 ...
it would be "lying", not "laying" since you are talking about people, not things.
Otherwise, not bad.
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Nice poem, I'm a sucker for the beach Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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different from what I usually read. It's not bad, it's just different.
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This is such an awesome acrostic!! The imagery is wonderfully done and you took me on the journey with you. Good luck with the contest.
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this is awesome, i love acrostics, and i LOVE anything about the beach. thanks for the entry!
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Great summertime poem!
I always love acrostic poems, and you did a marvelous job
Best of luck on that upgrade 
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Really creative write! For an acrostic this flows beautifully. The beach is lovely and full of romance and fun. I really enjoyed this write
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Nicely done! I liked the stanza: "Azure water crashing upon the shore. Tiny creatures crawling on the ocean floor." Fair amount of imagery and a cool twist with the mermaid! Best of luck and thanks for entering!
~Faithful-Star
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I realy enjoyed It made me want to pack up and head for the Chesapeak Bay. a very good acrostic, and I loved the rhyme scheme very smoothe.
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This is a really good poem. It does have a good beat to it. I did like it and it very well related to summer. Amazing job. I normally don't like acrostics. But you did this one good. The only thing I don't like is you didn't use puncuation at the ends of every line. I did like this. Amazing.
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This was very good. I'm not really a beach person, but I could feel the emotion in this one, and it even made me long to be at the beach. Very nicely done, good rhyme, especially for an acrostic. Thanks a lot for your entry.
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This is much better than your other acrostics, in my opinion. I can actually imagine this, since you give concrete examples of a day at the beach.
"I can’t forget thee" -- I know you meant to rhyme, but "thee" feels awkward for two reasons: one, you don't use it elsewhere, and two, the style is hardly archaic.
Often found, singing out of beat; Growing fond of a summer that, I never knew; -- commas are unnecessary.
"Every size and color, some are empties" -- empties?
I especially like the line breaks in the second to last stanza, and also the elaboration. This poem really makes me miss the beach. Is it imagery that's fresh, described in an original way? No. But it's you, and I cannot fault you for that.
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Wowwwww this poem is ingenious, not only is it a nice acrostic it rhymes too!
great write
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I really enjoyed this poem. Made me want to head to the beach. But I am not much of a beach person anymore. I like to go to the lake better. I enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Lots of details for this fun summer memory. I liked the "Never forget the week I spent with you/Growing fond of a summer, I never knew."
Marlene
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You have brought some great summer thoughts from the present and to some of us from the past
Thanks for joining in warm thoughts
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Wow, this is really beautiful.
With the first read through, you can hardly tell it's an acrostic, and amazing feat.
This is full of beautiful imagery and fond memories.
I love it.
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a beautifully written piece that brings back memories half buried beneath day to day crap...thanks for this little trip down memory lane!!! I truly enjoyed it,
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This takes me back to my younger days... a nostalgic piece to be sure! It was a delight to read and really brought back some great memories of days long ago! Thanks for entering and best wishes!
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lol come to the beach with me ?
just kidding this poem is as hot and fullfilling as those summer nights very good
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I love how its about the beach and I love line 12 "Growing fond of a summer that, I never knew"
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awsome poem, very in tune with nature. i like the subject too, makes me wanna go to the beach really really really REALLY bad, when its normally just really bad, lol! great write!
xoxo,
--gooshawn<3
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wonderful memories to be stored in your treasure box of life. This made me smile and want to be 24 again I love the description of the sea and sand at your feet and the constant distraction of sexy bodies! A fine piece, good luck
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that is a really good poem I like it a lot
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woot
me likey shmexi gurl
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wonderfull amy
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Summe rloving indeed...this flowed so well i agree with other comment etc, didnt feel an acrostic somewhat so job well done on flow darl
Good luck in the contest
Cin
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wow, it didn't really seem like an acrostic, i forgot it was. the flow is beautiful and it paints a really vivid picture of summer. loved it.
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Great acrostic Amy...
Well worded, well conceived and executed.
Unsigned
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Nice poem! I really like the story.
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omg. this was awesome! amy..this is like ur best yet! i loved it! it was amazing!!
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wow, very cool. not only did you make a very creative acrostic, but you penned a nicely portrayed image of summertime and the beach. nicely done =]
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ah you paint a picture well of the joys of sun and sand, walking hand in hand, across each golden strand,
a summer love that's grown, from two who were alone,
till autumn calls them home, with kisses blown through phones. I liked this poem a lot, good work is what you've got.~~~Artis
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Really nice, smooth, unforced rhyming helped make this poem great, on top of great, peaceful imagery, and not to mention wonderful phrasing of words. I really felt summer in this poem!
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
A+wesome
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this is beautiful it all pieces together well. And
you can picture it easily.
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I like what you did with this ~ just add some punctuation I'm not sure how the judges are about that , but lets not give them any reason to say something ~ This is a beautiful write dear ~ best of luck
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This is really good. Reminded me of Greese. I don't understand one line.."Each one filled, some are empties" But I think it may just be over my head. A nicely written acrostic. Good luck in the contest.
Kelli
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it is a nice acrostic, I am not fond of acrostics as I feel they prevent the writer from free flow of words and they tend to be choppy and cut off, so for an acrostic I have to say this is fairly well done nice job...
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good.
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awww cute acorstic and theres very vivid imagery here. i can see it
"Bikinis in so many varieties
Each one filled, some are empties"
lol those lines rock!
christina
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This is really nice...I love the way it is and I know what acrostic means, so it fits good....I LOVE it
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awww this is a cute peom!!! hope you win amy!!!!! -Gore
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a great write. Keep up the great work.
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that is really goo
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wow... iliked it!! Great Job !!
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agree with kira
lol other then that though i like it and clap if i had points left to do it p.p -
hell yeah! I cant wait for the summer to actually start.. I loved it aims
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Nicely done. I dont like the beach very much, but this poem makes me want to go anyway. Great job on the prompt.
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i love summer
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