after 27 times around
i find myself
thinning out
blueish in color
faded from time
like my favorite denim jeans
stretched and tattered
to fit my body
forgotten words in old books
mark the time here on earth
but now
like the pair of
had to buy flip-flops
from summers ago
lie in the darkened closet
indents in my mind
on my skin
like wedding rings
form that curve
so even when you take them off
they are still there
my body is all of these things
and more
yet my mind is so active
it is hard to imagine
all the time gone by
and all the time had
Author notes
Wow~ ok i chose my word and i wrote about it. yet never mentioned it. after said contest is over. i will clue the rest of you in.~ i would like to take this time to add some AN: i am about to turn 27 on the 23rd of May. when i was 21 i wrote a piece about 21 times around. when i read the words i could choose from , one in particular jumped at me (and begged to be written about)... so i kept it and used it like it was meant... Enjoy~
A contest entry
- A Wordplay Poetry Contest by -BlackKnight-.
600 points, ended June 9, 2008, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I'm going to go with either drift or hours.
I'm not really sure though. This one was good. It kind of drifted off towards the end though.
Perhaps some fine tuning. Other than that, and excellent piece. -
I was going to go out on a limb and say this was based on "drift", but I don't think that's correct. Oh well, I'll stick with it.
The first three-and-a-half stanzas in this were great...but I found the last two kinda disappointing. A big letdown from what could've been a pretty good piece.
Still, it wasn't all bad; really, the only part in here that needs work is the last stanza. -
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why i love to get comments... i do not prefer a lot of things... like punctuation , rhyme and anything set to a pattern... unless it is a totally useless and bizarre pattern... anywhos... stanzas shmanzas... i love it the way it is... thanks for taking the time to comment though...
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Wait till you have 51 times around to write about
Them flips lost their flop a long time ago & all the marks on the skin seem to have given in to the pull of gravity ... worn out is more like it Great stuff! But at 27 you're just gettin' good and worn in 
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I am disappointed someone beat me to the punch. I knew what the word was. I think you did a great job in this piece. Great imagery and then you read the an's and your like "yea, worn." so there you have it!!!
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Well-written projections
The word is "worn"! ^_^
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