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Puppet on a String.

I'm not a human.
I'm a living puppet.
Dancing on your command.
All you have to do is take the strings in hand.
I want to be human again.
Yet I want you to be happy.
I continue to dance at your command.
It's so damn tiring.
You're never there.
Yet you point out the flaws.
Should I keep on trying?
Should I continue to be your puppet?
You never seem to be happy with me.
I'm giving up on making you proud.
I'm cutting the strings.
I'd rather die than continue to be your puppet.
My life not your's.
Give me back my life.
*Snip* My life in my hands.

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  • Sir Ima Cucumber
    August 19, 2009

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    When a situation is bad, yes, snip away until you are free. It's a painful thing to be controlled, to be made to feel worthless. I do have some idea what that is like. Yes, don't hold it in, yell it...or at least write it on AllPoetry. Nicely done.


  • myrataal gold member
    May 12, 2008

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    Sometimes we feel like cutting strings ...

    but the truth is in the knowing that real freedom is inside ...

    You expressed your emotions well. The ending is visual and very effective. Well done.

    Love
    Myra


  • My Heroine .
    May 8, 2008

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    This was such an emotional poem. Sad yet amazing !!

    great job =D


  • Lucian Valcor
    May 6, 2008

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    nice poem i agree the flow seemed a little off and the poem seemed to me sort of a rant... but i really liked it so dont get discouraged just reading and pointing out flaws i really liked it

    Turtle


  • Era Umbra
    May 6, 2008

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    Well Done

    Good write! A lot of heart in it, but the flow seemed a little zig-zag like. Other than that I like the ending with the declared freedom "snip". You did well keep writing.


  • The Otep
    May 5, 2008

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    Wowsers...it is not fun being a puppet, but so beautiful to have freedom! Great job of expression,


  • W B Burkholder
    May 5, 2008
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    Freedom and... (Sapere Aude) daring to Know...
    We all have been there at one point or another.
    This piece speaks to growth and realization I think, and the courage of one to take their life in their own hands and move forward instead of being held back by those who would rather exert control rather than love and growth.
    Awesome


  • Anewor gold member
    May 5, 2008

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    Haven't we all felt like this. Whether it's family, work, friends.... sharpen your knife and cut the ties that bind but with an expalnation that you are going from "Being" to "Becoming" an adult, maybe then he will understand.  Good job


  • ForeverLastingComa
    May 5, 2008

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    This poem literally screamed at me, amazing write, i loved how you ended it

    "Give me back my life.
    *Snip* My life in my hands."

    When i started reading this i liked it and the i got lost on this line

    "All you have to do is take the strings in hand.
    I want to be human again."

    it sounded a bit out of place to me.

    i loved the way you compared yourself to a puppet and how you stated how the person is never around but yet always pointing out your flaws..i feel that ways sometimes also and i can relate to this poen amazingly. overall i really did like this poem

    Awsome write! =D


  • RainbowEyes
    May 5, 2008

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    I feel thi sway with my mom. I am her puppet due to the fact that she knows deep down that I am gay yet she wants to change it. So I act straight. I feel your frustration. Thi sis very good.

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