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promises

there's the day not everyone can keep to their oath
they say it's no big deal
oh yeah? wait till they do it to you; you'll see how that feels
sick of their empty words
and raising my hopes for nothing
when will you follow through
nothing is for nothing
a beautiful girl
a handsome man
promised her when he finished studying overseas
he'll come back to her and propose on his knees
that poor girl waited years and years
finally when she's an adult
and old enough to understand
she went to the restaurant
and find that same man with another woman
and a wedding band on his hands
better that man never promised anything in the first place
for he left that girl with a scarred emotion and broken heart
that girl finally got over it and found herself a caring soul
someone to nurse her scars and make her feel special and loved
that same man with the woman; the woman cheated on him and left him for someone older
thinking he could go back to his old flame and rekindle what was lost
turns out; too long, too late
found herself another mate
when he asked her why didn't she wait for him
she told him " you didn't mean it; you didn't care"
"i saw you and that woman, a kiss you both shared"
"your words don't mean anything; you and your empty promises."

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  • A-Daisy-Among-Roses
    November 16, 2008

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    this is interesting. no offense but the flow sucks. There are random ryhmes here and there, is that an accident?? The intro into the story throws me off, it doesnt mush, or flow with the rest of the poem.

    I like the idea, i like the story, but your execution is poor. This definately feels like a first draft writting.