I sit and I wait
For it to lift
This can't be my fate
It's not a gift.
Gifts are nice,
Kind, and thoughtful
This is a device
That is mean, cruel, and hateful.
Who is this person
That has taken over¿?
I don't want it to worsen,
I just want it to move-over.
Depression doesn't give
It only takes
It does not relieve
It only aches.
How do I remove
The sadness and the pain
How do I approve
Of the happy and the sane.
Help me please
To release this thing
Help me please
So it doesn't start deepening.
Author notes
2. Depression
A contest entry
- For those with no trophies... by islekine.
600 points, ended May 11, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - All for Fun (taking ALL poems from anyone) by Erozay.
450 points, ended May 7, 2008, 35 entries
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600 points, ended May 11, 2008, 22 entries
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405 points, ended November 18, 2008, 24 entries
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What do you think¿?
Comments
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Came here to return the favour
Great write on depression - been there done that - the ryme and flow are great - the content real - keep on keeping on - Bless God - Joe ------------------------------------------------------------ (((((Allison)))))
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its really gd i get everything your saying
its so true wat u r sayin -
Nice!!
Very good job!!! I loved it... Keep up the great work and good luck in my contest!
Shannon*Leah -
i love this poem i know exactly what you are saying i live with it everyday
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aww
This is a very good write... And the background is really scary looking... I loved this write though... You did a great job expressing how you feel... I wish you the best!!! Good luck in my contest!
SHannon*LEah -
i like this it has a really nice flow and rythm and the overall meaning was captivated well i enjoyed this
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Very well written here
Often whe young and older people start feeling low or has something happen that brings them down they fall so deep . Try to remember the past is done it can never be changed . One shall weep then find the way back to the joy they once knew . You have to take one step at a time and never close yourself in away from others for the human mind sticks in the depression without comunication with others . Even when you feel you cant you must reach out and tell someone what it is you are feeling talk about it and let it go in order to bring yourself back . Dont let it rule your every thought move on and in doing so a new life and joy shall emerge
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i agreew ith the last comment
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Thanks for putting name in...
Now...I critique on ten points...one is presentation.
All caps at the start of each line...breaks flow in my opinion...I know some of the darn word programs cap them.....
Write on!
*PEACE*
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