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Distances

Mile upon miles separate, divide but
thoughts connect this electricity us.

Lullabies dream untasted, unsavoured, undevoured -
a gulfless ocean meaningless, undisturbed to a
form once dead. A day to three hundred
apart – I hungered,
hungered for your song
denied, in denial and driving home
alone.

Year since was but forty,
in ignorance I played out my meagre life
on the treadmill towards tedium, fatigue,
this frustration, this now a lifetimed experience
makes me squat upon
an insignificant global dot while
you,
you strut, stride, pose
wide legged in an arrogance of security.
Still, this comforted insanity makes
us
flee inside ourselves to throw this life away,
while madness can only prove the vague chains
forged in our contemplation
distinction, separation,
division.

Even a climate conspires – you
laze, drowse warmly beneath your flaming
orb, a conception to caress your mind
embrace you with ever hopeful
enlightened fingers.

Here, icicle winds knife me into futile
consciousness, tranquil crickets smooth your dreams
angry traffic buzzes my sloth.  Divided by more than
our distance – a connection remains
we are there, imagined thoughts a gift
of you.

A frequency transmitted, conceptualised
You pledge
Submit
Deliver
File downloaded – I am within you.
Click to convert – you are without me. Physicality an
inconceivable alone but
who may realise this
possible.
A day may scathe –
a second contrive to mould communication
this tear of regret untasted, an us.

Mumbled I love you will be
all I can mutter for no
hesitant reply – an instant accord, murmured
affirmation returned – I love you –

no distance can exist now –
measures an insignificance to roads discovered.
Enlightenment a coupling, redemption a space
Unguarded, a one, two paths separating our way.

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  • MalevolentDesire
    May 9, 2008

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    I admit this was a little hard to follow, the flow seemed to be a bit erratic, but, on the same token, it was a great poem of missing and love.

    You expressed emotion and imagery very well, and I felt the longing through your words.

    Thank you for entering, and I wish you luck.


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    May 6, 2008

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    I want to thank you for entering my contest. this poem was kind of hard to follow but I do apprecite you staying on topic.


    • sassykitty
      May 6, 2008
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      cheers for the applause - the poem is a tad abstract, but then that's the way I tend to write! It's about how connected I am to someone extremely special who unfortunately lives 10 thousand miles away most of the time but how our lives are linked even though our days are in different times etc. Thanks for you comment.