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Drum beats

The heart

of a warrior
beats drums
in a rhythm

older than
the black hills.

Its sound

echoes
vibrates
courses

through existence.

Its sound

pulsates
intensifies
shapes

those that
come
into contact
with it.

Voices rise

to match
the cadenced beat

as spirits
of like nature

speak to each other.

The warrior huntress

pauses
listens
smiles

and goes back to her hunt.



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  • trekkergirl
    August 31, 2008

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    i really like the way this is written. The way your one word describes totally what you want it to. Good job!


  • Darkwell
    August 16, 2008

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    oooh this beats beautifully and takes you on a tribal journey of spirit. Just lovely

    WTG! Good luck in the contest

  • SoulWhispher
    May 18, 2008

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    This is a great poem that tells of a warrior's spirit, I loved the rthym and the flow, great job, blessings John


  • libithina
    May 14, 2008

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    I could almost hear the beat of the distant drum 'pulsates' and the beating throbbing land..rhythym builds 'listens smiles' 'then goes back to her hunt' after an excellent write and a read s and much Lib x x BRAVO


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    May 9, 2008

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    Remarkable..

    To truly capture the beat, one must first free their mind of any fear, for then and only then will a true warrior be listening to the beat from within. That is when the silence is heard that allows them, be it hunter or huntress, to step forward and face what lies ahead, with a cry that will echo through the veins of those hunted. A remarkabe piece here, naish for sharing your thoughts, well done.


  • LittleMoon silver member
    May 7, 2008

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    The warrior spirit lies coursing through the blood in the heartbeat to match the rhythm of the drums. Very nice write my friend.


  • Elfin
    May 5, 2008

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    Yes, I am sure that is the true heart of a warrior, the valour is definately in the blood. well done and niaish for sharing. Val


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    May 5, 2008

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    I am impressed...the warrior's spirit you have captured...the true warrior knows his heart and the huntress pauses and listens...For in Nature there is but only one Heart Beat...niaish so much for sharing and for entering

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