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the sweetest good-bye

Let me begin by quoting you
"La vie est belle…"

 

[ Life Is Beautiful ]
I honestly couldn't agree more...



I love how you Paint me with words...
You say one line and
I'm stuck repeating every verse...



its Music to my ears
but it doesn’t sway me...
your lyrics just don’t move me .....



I feel completely free.


My wings are no longer broken
and I'm about to fly
care to watch me disappear with the sunset
knowing I wont return when it rises?



I doubt you will....

You couldn't even handle the sweetest of goodbyes…

Author notes

This isn't Poetry
I'm trying a new writing style using images and words to make you see what I see.

I try to use simple words to paint images.. and for those who can not see what I see I've posted pictures to point you in the right direction and make you feel as if you wrote the poem..

This isn't poetry this is a new writing method I'm trying.

The Quote is in french by the way

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  • Xtianor
    May 28

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    It makes a person wants to read it over and over and over again. You feel you are in a movie, moving with the words and pictures, a very slow motion clip in your mind giving you the time to grasp each line. i like it alot.


  • angelicawhat3
    May 28
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    interesting...

    hey thanks for the compliment... your style here is quite interesting... i like it

  • LoveDroveMeCrazy4U
    May 25

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    Beautiful

    Interesting new style of writting I don't think that I've seen it before. I like that you found picture to incorporate in your poem. It's very interesting the line in French is a beautiful line. I like it over all . Nice Job
    **CML**

  • maktub
    May 22
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    that was incredible depth; so stirring...I hope you do more in this style of writing.

  • Dragonia Dark
    May 15

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    I have never needed the imagry in this light but... it is amazing I beleive it makes me feel more not just tears. Actually no tears at all just a freedom so light and so bright that I feel that I could fly. Its as if by her words you can repeat them and be free but no tbecause they were her words or they were said by her but because they are words simple and true. Enlightening and amazing something more then just simple words I found here but a truly exquisite artwork that is nothing short of amazing. ~Dragonia~


  • xXcrazychristinaXx
    May 14
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    love how the pictures relate to wht ur saying. good job and i love this style.

  • SugarCandyKittyKat
    May 13
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    Fantastic....so refreshing,so beautiful...

    Your words put me at ease...

  • Hsm freak
    May 13
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    beautiful poams!!

  • Hsm freak
    May 13
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    I like this poam.
    the words fit in the poam

  • fluffmarsh
    May 12
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    That is a very interesting style.

  • kavi22
    May 11
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    I really like this poem, your pictures are beautiful and I love your words!

  • Anyajoellienne
    May 10
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    I love the pictures - very artistic , comfortable, kool


  • CptxMorgan
    May 10

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    Very nice

    I liked the collage approach you took, it is undoubtedly unique.

    I think the writing itself could stand on it's own and still be enthralling, but combined with the pictures it is truly in a league of it's own.


  • BabyButterflyKisses
    May 8
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    wow

    this is really cool i really like it!


  • Broken4Life
    May 8
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    I love it. I like writing like this- using images to help others see what I do. Very well done.

  • thearmsofsorrow
    May 8

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    this is actually really cool
    nice idea
    and i think the pictures are really cool
    seems a bit romanticy though haha
    overall nice one
  • Climbing2nothing
    May 8

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    AWWW WOW! yeah works infinitly well, as hybrid forms create such new character, multiple angles of muse and well good zen is such a seed inspiring way of doing things i am sure the person is touched deeply, i know i am, hope to see much more!
    w chai and a good couch
    -JAS

    . Rewarded 6


  • IanG silver member
    May 8
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    Thank you for commenting on my poem Autumn

  • Eternal Cascade
    May 6

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    awesome

    Dearest Lio,
    it has been almost a year now since we spoke i missed you!!

    nice to see yr posting again and i'm loving this new idea!!
    altho i think yr words would still carry ones mind off to images similar to what u have chosen should you not have posted them aswell, very clever indeed i love it!! xx


  • Vernal Bloom
    May 6

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    This is Just so great. I remember the first time I read this! I just went to an extasy feeling. Your images, your simple yet so powerful words! Ah this is a great style.

    Thank you for presentation of this dance of words. *Smiles*

    ~Massy~


  • Spiritual Soul Greeters member
    May 5

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    wow I love it! The different pictures as it goes along is cool, and adds to what the poem says. This was such a beautiful write!

    Good Job!

    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    May 5

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    I love it. The way that you could truly paint your picture in words... without the images included.

    They are a nice touch, though and the particular images that you chose are gorgeous.

    It'll be nice to see you posting fresh. A clean slate with me

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