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Your Eyes



Your eyes held no remorse for me
My soul fractured, my heart did break
All those promises, turned to dust
I gasped for air, you walked away

My soul fractured, my heart did break
Emotions running Oh so high
The emptiness of your words still
Ringing in my ears, stabbing pain

All those promises turned to dust
My life and all the plans discussed
Gone...Memories are all I'm left
Like small pieces of broken glass

I gasped for air, you walked away
Pain like this, I'd never felt before
Waiting for the numbness to start
I will never forget...your eyes


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  • Sgt B silver member
    May 5

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    Interesting style

    Your emotion was passed on the the reader very well in this one.
    I could feel your pain.
    The format you used was very unique.
    Good job!

    ~Ron~


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    May 5

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    *sigh*

    Mum this was a very powerful heart breaking sad poem. it kind of hurts to read this poem because I am already in my own darkness and mess in my own little world but oh well. any ways this is beautiful because you wrote it so well and your analogie with rthe broken glass was purdy. any ways good work and keep it up Love, Paul


  • Amera gold member
    May 5

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    Beautiful and sad. It reminds me of when I lost you when you left AP. I missed you so much.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • PerVirtuous Allan gold member
    May 5
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    Powerfully sad and heartwrenchingly good. three bunnies for you.