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The Proposal




You handed me a flower
Symbolic of loves power
Happier, I couldn't be
A flower, you handed me

You picked me up at eight
Told me to not be late
Your eyes resemble a pup
At eight you picked me up

At the car you opened the door
It made me love you even more
Where would this go? How far?
You opened the door at the car

This night to remember
A night of sweet surrender
You have become my light
To remember this night

Today we commit forever
For always we'll be together
Winder, Summer, come what may
Forever we commit today








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  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    May 9

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    Extremely Beautiful

    With a breathless *sigh* I smile at your poem here. I really love this soft romantic style poem here. its amazing what you pen sometimes and how you have the ability to swap subjuects from poem to another. any ways really love the abstract image you painted into this poem and any ways also loved the depth and quality to it. keep up the good work


  • Amera gold member
    May 5

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    Aww... this is adorable with wonderful rhyme. So Allan's going to sign up huh? He's a handfull.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • PerVirtuous Allan gold member
    May 5
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    I'm in. Where do I sign?


  • Dreamana
    May 5

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    Beautiful. To commit forever is something that is so often spoken of, but rarely honoured. nicely written.

    If u get a moment, please review 1 of mine.