lust pours
with wanton madness
I drink it up,
every drop
as if it will never stop
until ashamed
of my gluttony
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Quickie
20 Word Picture Prompt
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love how this one leaves the reader hanging...I think this is a very potent technique. I try to use it often. Thanks for the comments on "Daddy Time"
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Wonderful way with words,well expressed
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This is that touch of wonder I've been missing. Note: I think precisely the same things...I'm just too timid to admit it here...lol.
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Lust is uncontrolable which is what makes it so powerful. Wanton with desire and wanton of pleasure!
Well expressed!
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nice
nice descriptive write for the prompt . . good luck in the contest . . liked "lust pours with wanton madness" and "until ashamed of my gluttony" . .
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I love lusty poetry. Not so certain that lust is ever ashamed of itself, but we certainly can. I love the "drinking every drop." In my mind's eye I see you with your tongue ready to slurp up the last drop of sensuality.
Nice flow and tone in this. Lovely and lusty in a soft way.
~ Joyce
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great job.... i like this... good luck in contest.... thank you for sharing with us............!!!!!!!
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Wow! I love the way you expressed the take on this prompt..Excellence at it's finest. Best of luck to you!
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Excellent use of metaphor here, short but intense.
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quite powerful and to the punch, madam
leaving the audience with a vivid imagination
Tamara
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I wish I had the time and just a smidgeon of your talent to enter these quickies. You say so much with just so few words and the images you manage to leave in the readers mind are truly amazing. I like the subtleness of this, the picture as well as the wording. I think it all meshes well. Another good write from your golden pen!
~Midnight Lace
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It's really ashame this had to end at 20 words because I could feel a sense of confinement in creativity here and I would have really liked to have seen where you could have taken this, especially knowing what amazing talent you have as a writer. It stands well enough as it is though and you did it justice with just 20 words. Go for the gold Lady!
JLG
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I see the connection in your thoughts and the image here. It always leaves me stunned how you manage to put two and two together and then form the right words to describe such depth of emotion and intensity of feeling. Good luck in this one. I like it.
TXCowgirl
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