Theres desire in your eyes
As it starts with one deep kiss
I feel your hands travel up my thighs
Then fingernails bite into my hips
You can taste the blood on my tongue
From where you bite me here and there
They could walk in any minute
Were both too far gone to care
I beg you to make me yours
To let me feel every ounce of pain
You gently slide down my panties
Your tongue takes my breath away
You then lay me down on the bed
I feel you slide in between my thighs
I drag my nails down your back
I want so bad to make you mine
You press yourself in deep
Causing tears to run down my face
Then fall deep asleep in my arms
Where you will always have a place
Author notes
i did this one in class when i was bored.just for the record,it isnt based on real life
hope yall like it
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better not be based on real life. ur supposed to tell me this shit. lol i love u grl(and if it was true u kno we would all kill lil Mr. Pothead.) i love u!
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Erotically amorous.
"You then lay me down on the bed
I feel you slide in between my thighs
I drag my nails down your back
I want so bad to make you mine"
The want and longing in this write is incredible and obvious.
It may not be about your life, but it shows that it's something you've thought about.
It's amazing that you can write a great piece like this in class. Great creativity..
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'There's desire in your eyes
As it starts with one deep kiss'
the first step of the pleasant journey
'I feel your hands travel to my thighs'
your soft pretty thighs....irresistable, my love!
'Then fingernails bite into my hips'
I'm sorry but I know you enjoy that
'You can taste the blood of my tongue'
vampirish!
'From where you bite me here and there'
I couldn't help it, sweet doll!
'They could walk in any minute
We're both too far gone to care'
boldness!
'I beg you to make me yours
To let me feel every ounce of pain'
total submission
'You gently slide down my panties'
pleasure...lust...fun...charm
'Your tongue takes my breath away'
you're pampering my tongue, cutie!
'You then lay me down on bed'
It gives me enormous pleasure to do so
'I feel you slide in between my thighs'
the climax is not too far away
'I drag my nails down your back'
I'm being paid in the same coins
'I want so bad to make you mine'
so do I
'You press yourself in deep
Causing tears to run down my face'
You asked for it, honey!
'Then fall deep asleep in my arms
Where you will always have a peace'
undoubtedly.....
It's a brilliant piece of writing, my dear!
Every idea so natural...
a well wrought poem, honey!
Kisses...all over
Wish I could bring you that sweet pain that you crave for!
Galaxy2
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enticing
Excellent work
Loved it
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Thanx 4 the feedback. Its very apprecieated!
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