When the moon has risen
silver shadows
shroud each movement,
hesitant footsteps become
an unwavering sprint -
I return to you.
A contest entry
- 20 words by divebar.
300 points, ended May 5, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical comments, please
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Quick Moment
Lots of impact in such a little package. Good Write! I like the increase of the haste at the end. It really defines the need. Well done! -
With twenty words... I think you did a very good job of capturing the moment, and describing it.
Well done.
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i love it. i can't say any more than that, because it's so beautiful. the simple words are perfect.
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