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Out of the Night

When the moon has risen
silver shadows
shroud each movement,
hesitant footsteps become
an unwavering sprint -
I return to you.

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  • Era Umbra
    May 6, 2008

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    Quick Moment

    Lots of impact in such a little package. Good Write! I like the increase of the haste at the end. It really defines the need. Well done!


  • Perception
    May 5, 2008

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    With twenty words... I think you did a very good job of capturing the moment, and describing it.
    Well done.


  • stylization
    May 5, 2008
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    i love it. i can't say any more than that, because it's so beautiful. the simple words are perfect.