You and I,
as everlasting
as the paper love notes burning.
You and I,
I guess it was
never meant to last the day.
You and I,
these promises
are folly in the end.
You and I,
about as close
as you can get to blasphemy.
You and I,
just an impulse
out of the unordinary.
You and I,
the epitome of
everything in the end.
{(blue)}
Author notes
3. Write me the saddest experience of your life
But I should have written a brighter piece, to celebrate your wedding..
A contest entry
- A Contest After A Long Time by Farha11.
410 points, ended May 30, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - how far?? by onapedestalIstand.
300 points, ended May 6, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is exceptional
very exceptional write. Loved it. Short verses, but delivering the correct message. I liked the last stanza most:
You and I,
the epitome of
everything in the end.
Thanks for entering my contest. All the best.
Regards,
Hafsa
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This is really well written...the repetition of you and i works really well. Good work i love it!! Leila x
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hmm very nice
I realli like this write flows very beautiful 2 the paper and is penned very well...sorry it took so long to comment back as I just recently got out of the hospital thnk you for commenting mi entry as well greatli appreciated and keep up the gewd work best of luck 2 you in the future and in the contest as well...weel penned
andi
(redhanded)
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tears...ahh it burns..thanks...sarah
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