Thoughts swirling
changing and drowning
inside the depths of the world.
So much to see,
too many things to do,
running around to find
anything to quench my thirst
of the unending questions
for my life.
Stopping,
I listen,
for the sound of a heart,
pounding in the night,
the silent shadow
walking slowly,
towards my frozen figure.
The hand reaches out,
but fear surrounds me
and I can't break free
of the suffocating darkness
of my own fear.
The comfort radiates,
and the warmth sings
from the now visible person.
But will I take the outstretched hand?
Will I let myself be hurt?
The pressure of the world
is crushing my skinny sholders
and I can't hold on much longer.
And the hand stills lies there,
waiting for me to touch.
Author notes
I think I'm in love with someone and I don't know what to do.
A contest entry
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Comments
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Sometimes you just have to go for it!!
It's scary to open yourself up to being hurt but you never know unless you do.
Thanks for entering
darlintlc
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i like the mediocrity of this piece.
The sound and meaning flows into the reader's heart.
Keep sharing yout gift.
HENSLEY
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Scarey until the end relizing you might know the person. Best to you in the contest.
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