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Seasons Of My Heart

As winter fades into spring
Taking with it
The frosty mountain peaks
My heart yearns for you

Author notes

okay this is not my best, my muse is kinda lacking, but I tried

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  • divebar
    May 5, 2008
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    not exatly sure why you chose not to punctuate. not too big of a deal. its a little expected. written fairly well but not particularly powerful.

    the use of fades was a little odd. in transition to spring, one generally thinks "bloom." that was an interesting play. im not sure that it was incredibly effective though.


  • islekine gold member
    May 5, 2008
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    I Love the picture!

    Interesting contest...Best wishes!
    Write on!
    *PEACE*