&we could have sat there for hours
smoking cigarettes and sharing secrets
you and nicotine are all I will ever need
tomorrow could never mean more to me
nothing compared to you, baby
you were more than welcome to close the space between us
to make our hearts race
and you did it with passion
hot enough to burn our lips
OUR hearts couldn't pump faster
our lungs couldn't breathe harder
our hands couldn't explore each other better
[I memorized every inch of you]
&I couldn't help but pray for it to last
baby, fate works in crazy ways
but it never put you&I together
not like we did
&it's been too long since I've felt you
you can't step out and come back
it's an all or nothing kind of thing
we lost our chance to squealing tires&broken glass
I can't draw your body on the pavement
quite like those men in black suits
they said you didn't feel a thing
but I know better than anyone what you've felt
&baby, to be honest
it's ripping me apart
tears never suited my face
but now I shed them without hesitation
every are-you-okay I hear receives a blank stare
I was never a dramatic kind of girl
I'll drink away our memories
&I'll cut away your promises
I'll replay every word you said to me
in the last three months if thats what it takes
I'm popping happiness daily
in capsule form to heal my broken heart
a prescription I have to remember to fill
so to be fair, forever was a few years short
your number was up too soon
&I don't have faith enough left in me
to justify your coffin
&I can't say goodbye with more sincerity
than these red-eyed hysterics
[I'll never stop loving you]
Author notes
"this is the sound of a broken heart beating." the last goodnight<3
of i n s i n c e r i t y
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A contest entry
- I've Been Here Four Years Today... Remind Me Why :D by DramaQueen469.
4000 points, ended June 26, 58 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow, this is just heartbreaking.
You've written the emotions out so perfectly and this really hit me hard.
I don't know what else to say.
♥
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A beautiful write, full of emotions and lovely imagery...it really moved me deep inside
''&we could have sat there for hours
smoking cigarettes and sharing secrets
you and nicotine are all I will ever need
tomorrow could never mean more to me
nothing compared to you, baby''
the first parahraph just sucked me in...very well penned!
congrats on the bronze trophy- well deserved
take care
Suza
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This is a truly stunning write; I could really relate.
Thankyou so much for entering this piece in my contest, and I wish you the best of luck!
♥ Maria ♥ -
wow i couldn't tell that this was you until i read the author's notes. this isn't something i'd expect from you, but i loved it nonetheless.
&it's been too long since I've felt you
beautiful -
-we lost our chance to squealing tires&broken glass- DAMN.
-I can't draw your body on the pavement
quite like those men in black suits
they said you didn't feel a thing
but I know better than anyone what you've felt- AHH!!
This is stunning, though I think some punctuation wouldn't hurt because it kind of confused me at parts without it. (:
You're brilliant. Enough said. (:
Thanks for entering and good luck. -
Fantastic! This poem has incredible imagery, I feel as though you have put me right into the story. I can relate pretty well so I understand the feeling. You have done an excellent job in bringing all those emotions into words
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This is so amazing, its simple and elegant and REAL, sometimes poetry isn't but this feels in the present moment and it's amazing, this is exceptional. Amazing job.
~Menna -
&we could have sat there for hours
smoking cigarettes and sharing secrets
you and nicotine are all I will ever need
tomorrow could never mean more to me
nothing compared to you, baby
stunning.
so very relatible.
sad but amazing write. -
just made my day more upseting than it already is, not that this isn't a good piece, you are very tallented indead, i loved it. I can relate to this poem so much , i know what it's like to lose someone you love, you can never stop loving them no matter what and in a way I think they know that. They will always be in your heart and thoughts. Wonderful write, keep the pen flowing
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Wow.
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